bluedad pop song with lyric by ouroboros

[Laguna Rising]

That is a great melody! The vocals are heart-rending. Perfectly spare arrangement. And yeah, those are fantastic lyrics!

Very catchy theme, a really nice song
Minor troubles to fix :

i share cptgone's opinion about the vocal, garry.
as the song is a lttle bit static, you could try to use a slightly higher bpm.
and i would give more presence to the guitars, against the bass.

I quoted Wopelka trying to suggest you improvement and being critical: I like the song anyway
Well done

Cheers

[Big Karma]

This is real sunday afternoon stuff - just perffick!

I like the laziness of the voice, kind of laid back and easy to listen to.

Nice melodies and structure too - not hard on the ears - gentle but also has feeling and emotion too.

Nice one B'dad!

Cool lyrics ouroboros

[bluedad]

thanks wopelka, laguna and BK!
I think I'll pull the plug on this one and see if I can implement the changes suggested. It's a good song I'd hate for my performance to bring it down. I never asked, ouroboros do you sing??

[experimental.crow]

fkuc the auto-tune ...
the vocal is part of what makes it your song , gary ...

you have a recognizable stylee , which is uniquely you ...
i expect it , when i d/l your work ...

[ouroboros]

I think this is a stonker of a tune, Bluedad! I love the melody and the feel.
Thanks all for the kind words but B.D. really did all the work; and a fine job at that.

(do I sing? not really. I can physically hold a tune, but the way you kind of snarl/emphasize some of the lines I can't do and I love the character you give them.)I am intrigued by Wopelka's comment re: guitar though. You've got a great sound there, too.

A real treat

[bluedad]

fkuc the auto-tune ...
the vocal is part of what makes it your song , gary ...

you have a recognizable stylee , which is uniquely you ...
i expect it , when i d/l your work ...

well, no autotune for sure. I think instead, I'll just raise everything up a semi-tone and speed it up just a bit; it'll be more in my vocal range and perhaps be able to control it more.

@ouroboros, glad you liked it! It's nice to come across a lyric that kind of writes its' own melody.

[Daniel Pompougnac]

Hello, man,

I've listened a lot of songs on your webpages. Great.
I like "Love song" with Vurt. Nice.
I've not found the song with Ouroboros. What's the name of this song ?

Bump for all your songs

Daniel Pompougnac