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Lady J · Post by **Lady J** » Sun May 07, 2006 7:04 am

Just wanted to see what ya thought of this... it is not finished and certainly not mastered yet. After hearing "S.O.S" I finally decided to do a new tune with new lyrics based on an old 80s tune i like and which some of you are probably familiar.

10
http://www.the-backups.com/10.mp3

I am still writing lyrics at this point and all of the tune is subject to change.

Critques please

Bluze · Post by **Bluze** » Sun May 07, 2006 12:52 pm

Listening to it right now. I think it's great... eighties style

!
What instruments did you use? How did you make the sound at about 0:29 / 2:28 ?
Keep it up,

Bluze

ianweb123 · Post by **ianweb123** » Sun May 07, 2006 12:58 pm

good stuff

Kriminal · Post by **Kriminal** » Sun May 07, 2006 1:09 pm

sounds like a killers demo....

_starcraft_ · Post by **_starcraft_** » Sun May 07, 2006 1:24 pm

absolutely brilliant.(especially first 40 seconds) i guess u used automat for most synth parts.
that cheap tb303 at the end i'm not sure it fits ...

Lady J · Post by **Lady J** » Sun May 07, 2006 1:35 pm

Bluze wrote:Listening to it right now. I think it's great... eighties style !
What instruments did you use?

Drums:
Battery

Synths:
FM-7
Pro-53
Imposcar
Juno-X2
Vangard
Trilogy
Tau2

Guitar:
A Squire 59 into Amplitube Classic with one of my ToneHeaded 80s patches

I think that's it. I'll check in a little bit to make sure i didn't leave anything out.

How did you make the sound at about 0:29 / 2:28 ?

I am not sure which one you mean. Can you perhaps be more specific?

Keep it up,

Bluze

Lady J · Post by **Lady J** » Sun May 07, 2006 1:38 pm

_starcraft_ wrote:absolutely brilliant.(especially first 40 seconds) i guess u used automat for most synth parts.

Nope. But I probably could have now thaty you mention it.

that cheap tb303 at the end i'm not sure it fits ...

Yeah I was thinking about taking the Muon Tau 2 out.

S.HUSH · Post by **S.HUSH** » Sun May 07, 2006 2:08 pm

MUCH better. It's cool that you branch out into different styles. IMO i would stick with the pop stuff.

I would change the drum sounds. Make them PUNCHY!! Or at least make sure that snare really hits on this tune (longer hit with reverb or use a more low end hit so you can really feel the hit).

Also, the vocals are really going to make or break this tune. I hear "breathy" (at times) male vocals for this one as opposed to a female vocal. It has to be sung with passion or this tune will fall flat.
Anyways...good luck with this one!!!!!

BTW...I know this is a Cars tune but i forget the name.....Is it "Hello"?

Lady J · Post by **Lady J** » Sun May 07, 2006 2:23 pm

S.HUSH wrote:MUCH better. It's cool that you branch out into different styles. IMO i would stick with the pop stuff.

I would change the drum sounds. Make them PUNCHY!! Or at least make sure that snare really hits on this tune (longer hit with reverb or use a more low end hit so you can really feel the hit).

Also, the vocals are really going to make or break this tune. I hear "breathy" (at times) male vocals for this one as opposed to a female vocal. It has to be sung with passion or this tune will fall flat.

passion I agree with but the other stuff....nah. You're just thinking of the Cars tune.
Listen to "Tainted Love" by Soft Cell

and then "SOS by Rhianna" to see how new lyrics sung by a singer of a different sex in a different way can completely make a new tune out of old.

If a male singer sang on this tune in the way you mentioned it would instantly be "oh that's a weak Cars imitation."

Anyways...good luck with this one!!!!!

BTW...I know this is a Cars tune but i forget the name.....Is it "Hello"?

yes

W

S.HUSH · Post by **S.HUSH** » Sun May 07, 2006 2:38 pm

I'll check out SOS later. As for going with female vocals...just as long as it's not sung in a dramatic RnB style where they over exaggerate every word

Lady J · Post by **Lady J** » Sun May 07, 2006 2:41 pm

I am thinking about sing in a more kinda fun, dancey pop kinda way ala Gwen in "What You Waiting For".

Kriminal · Post by **Kriminal** » Sun May 07, 2006 2:44 pm

so not content with ripping off Beyonce/Kriss Kross, now ya gonna rip off Soft Cell/Rhianna...why not try something original with all that 'talent' you keep telling us you have? Be a bit more 'cutting edge' eh...

Lady J · Post by **Lady J** » Sun May 07, 2006 2:48 pm

S.HUSH wrote:I'll check out SOS later. As for going with female vocals...just as long as it's not sung in a dramatic RnB style where they over exaggerate every word

Here you go: http://music.msn.com/artist/?artist=41811670

Lady J · Post by **Lady J** » Sun May 07, 2006 2:51 pm

Kriminal wrote:so not content with ripping off Beyonce/Kriss Kross, now ya gonna rip off Soft Cell/Rhianna...why not try something original with all that 'talent' you keep telling us you have? Be a bit more 'cutting edge' eh...

All music is derivative and this is a tune i started like a year and a half ago just for fun but never really thought of finishing until I heard Rhianna's Tainted Love inspired tune. I thought originally, "no one is going to want to hear an old 80s synthpop tune with new lyrics in a new way" until I heard "S.O.S"

And no i am not ripping off Soft Cell/Rhianna.. see my tune is going to be dancey PopRock, Rhianna's is dancey PopnB . There's a difference.

Kriminal · Post by **Kriminal** » Sun May 07, 2006 2:55 pm

no, sounds like a killers rip off at the start...

New tune based on old 80s synth-pop tune (Unfinished)