http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yER9hzuSCIc
waitin for your feedback
Unknown Journey
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- KVRist
- Topic Starter
- 84 posts since 29 Feb, 2012
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- KVRAF
- 7880 posts since 16 Apr, 2003 from -on the outside looking in
Interesting piece - the opening arp does not lead where I thought it would!
My feedback (take with a grain of salt):
The mix is very nice. Maybe the percs could be panned a bit more to widen the soundstage. Compositionally it is too repetitive for me. The guitar lines are very welcome breaks from the piano repeating. You could drop the piano out earlier and introduce other elements, or just play a slightly different line. Also, the piano has too much mid for me. Maybe try eq'ing somewhere from 800-1k?
Anyways, just some guessing. Nice work, thanks for sharing.
My feedback (take with a grain of salt):
The mix is very nice. Maybe the percs could be panned a bit more to widen the soundstage. Compositionally it is too repetitive for me. The guitar lines are very welcome breaks from the piano repeating. You could drop the piano out earlier and introduce other elements, or just play a slightly different line. Also, the piano has too much mid for me. Maybe try eq'ing somewhere from 800-1k?
Anyways, just some guessing. Nice work, thanks for sharing.
..what goes around comes around..
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- KVRAF
- 2290 posts since 18 Oct, 2010 from Japan
Yeah, I have to agree with ouroboros on the repetition.
This track is nice, just doesn't really do it for me. The initial arp sound is cool, but the other synth sounds are pretty uninteresting. the Piano itself is repetitious, and the melody it plays doesn't even have much interest in it to be repeated so much.
The song might hold up better if it was done at a faster pace. Or at least that piano part might benefit, I don't know about the rest.
This track is nice, just doesn't really do it for me. The initial arp sound is cool, but the other synth sounds are pretty uninteresting. the Piano itself is repetitious, and the melody it plays doesn't even have much interest in it to be repeated so much.
The song might hold up better if it was done at a faster pace. Or at least that piano part might benefit, I don't know about the rest.