Exclamations of a child ( electronic)
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- KVRian
- Topic Starter
- 1273 posts since 9 Jan, 2013 from morf
Hello,
https://soundcloud.com/eauson/exclamations-of-a-child
A day in the life of hyperactivity, because that's the way that life goes...
Comments and feedback appreciated
https://soundcloud.com/eauson/exclamations-of-a-child
A day in the life of hyperactivity, because that's the way that life goes...
Comments and feedback appreciated
Last edited by Eauson on Fri Jun 22, 2018 5:32 pm, edited 4 times in total.
Man is least himself when he talks in the first person. Give him a mask, and he'll show you his true face
- KVRAF
- 21195 posts since 8 Oct, 2014
My Feedback
Music - 7.5
Instruments - 8
Performance - 8.5
Mix - 7
Overall - 7.75
Comments: Quirky little tune. Something almost kid like about it. Bass a little muddy, at least on my system. Mix also could have a tad more air. Would have liked a little more development of theme. All in all, not bad. Enjoyed listening.
Music - 7.5
Instruments - 8
Performance - 8.5
Mix - 7
Overall - 7.75
Comments: Quirky little tune. Something almost kid like about it. Bass a little muddy, at least on my system. Mix also could have a tad more air. Would have liked a little more development of theme. All in all, not bad. Enjoyed listening.
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- KVRian
- 893 posts since 12 Jun, 2006
As Wag says: definitely 'quirky'!
Great overall groove created...infectious!
The hectic opening riffs needed to stop a lot earlier for me...I would've liked them to drop out at around 30 seconds or so, leaving the drums, bass and pad / chords to support a newly entered more chilled and singable, catchy melody...then the hectic bits could have come in again to good effect as a contrasting section?
Definitely needs a serious contrasting, more chilled section at some point for my ears...the quirky, warbling just gets too much after a while!
Definitely has potential.
Great overall groove created...infectious!
The hectic opening riffs needed to stop a lot earlier for me...I would've liked them to drop out at around 30 seconds or so, leaving the drums, bass and pad / chords to support a newly entered more chilled and singable, catchy melody...then the hectic bits could have come in again to good effect as a contrasting section?
Definitely needs a serious contrasting, more chilled section at some point for my ears...the quirky, warbling just gets too much after a while!
Definitely has potential.
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- KVRian
- Topic Starter
- 1273 posts since 9 Jan, 2013 from morf
Many thanks, it was a bit of a jam session when it was originally made, so there are elements which need to be developed, its a departure from my usual, as mix had finalised treatment outside of daw. Will assess on some other speakers and look to improvewagtunes wrote:My Feedback
Overall - 7.75
Comments: Quirky .
Something almost kid like about it.
Bass a little muddy, at least on my system.
Mix also could have a tad more air.
Would have liked a little more development of theme. All in all, not bad. Enjoyed listening.
Many thanks, yes there are elements that are a bit overwhelming, I should have included the writeup in my original post which is on soundcloud ( which i will paste above) as it somewhat explains the nature of the track and my thinking, hyperactive formative yearsChamMusic wrote:As Wag says: definitely 'quirky'!
Great overall groove created...infectious!
The hectic opening riffs needed to stop a lot earlier for me...I would've liked them to drop out at around 30 seconds or so, leaving the drums, bass and pad / chords to support a newly entered more chilled and singable, catchy melody...then the hectic bits could have come in again to good effect as a contrasting section?
Definitely needs a serious contrasting, more chilled section at some point for my ears...the quirky, warbling just gets too much after a while definitely has potential.
Will, look again at the structure and see if I can calm it down a bit, a little like my mum in the department store thrashing around on the floor, mimicking my disruptive behaviour.
That seemed to get my attention
Man is least himself when he talks in the first person. Give him a mask, and he'll show you his true face