by Shangsean; Tue Dec 11, 2012 5:29 am
by Frantz; Tue Dec 11, 2012 7:23 pm
The pattern with both of your pieces is they start slowly, get interesting, and then end too soon. So you may want to think about form.
Note the word "oriental" is considered offensive in American English unless you are referring to objects like rugs.
by Shangsean; Tue Dec 11, 2012 8:36 pm
"That rug's alive!" they cried.
"That's no rug, that's an alien!" came the reply.
Hence the title...
Good call on the form. I agree that it's something to look at, although I think this track has said all that's needed to be said in this case. I just tend to create things in little scenes and when the scene is over in my head, so is the track. I can see why you would have a problem with the form of BELOW ZERO though and it is something I want to go back to.
Thanks for the feedback.
Thanks also to seismic1.
by polyslax; Wed Dec 12, 2012 7:02 pm
by macmurphy; Wed Dec 12, 2012 10:38 pm
by fateamenabletochange; Wed Dec 12, 2012 11:29 pm
Everything sounds clear, with the alien kind of discordant edge, interesting stuff.