Hey, I'd really appreciate some feedback on this track. If someone could pinpoint what's wrong or what's missing (or if there's too much going on), feel free.
https://soundcloud.com/parallelloners/latesummer
Thanks!
latesummer [electronic]
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0:40 & 0:46 you've got two risers going nowhere, followed by a downer, so I am expecting a change, but it resumed the same as before, so you could think of that as unique, or I personally thought that was strange.
2:56-3:06, that build could be a lot better (gradually build up the drum sequence, insert pitch ups, go up an octave). In a build you build tension then release that tension. There was no real tension to release. Just after the build you could insert a volume or energy change. it would be nice to hear some lead melody instead of a kalimba-type arp.
I like the retro vibe... ...
2:56-3:06, that build could be a lot better (gradually build up the drum sequence, insert pitch ups, go up an octave). In a build you build tension then release that tension. There was no real tension to release. Just after the build you could insert a volume or energy change. it would be nice to hear some lead melody instead of a kalimba-type arp.
I like the retro vibe... ...
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parallel loners parallel loners https://www.kvraudio.com/forum/memberlist.php?mode=viewprofile&u=444039
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The first part was on purpose; I wanted to go into a different melody for the middle part of the song and have the chorus/drop at 3.00. I guess I could just switch it up without a build.Bansaw wrote: ↑Sun Jul 07, 2019 11:26 pm 0:40 & 0:46 you've got two risers going nowhere, followed by a downer, so I am expecting a change, but it resumed the same as before, so you could think of that as unique, or I personally thought that was strange.
2:56-3:06, that build could be a lot better (gradually build up the drum sequence, insert pitch ups, go up an octave). In a build you build tension then release that tension. There was no real tension to release. Just after the build you could insert a volume or energy change. it would be nice to hear some lead melody instead of a kalimba-type arp.
I like the retro vibe... ...
I definitely agree that the second build could be more gradual in retrospect. Thanks for the advice!