My Attempt to make a Catchy pop Song!! lemme know what you think

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KVRist
90 posts since 28 Feb, 2016

Post Thu Feb 18, 2021 5:03 pm

I wrote these two different songs about this girl but and decide to merge them together
https://soundcloud.com/hando-aguilar/on ... ver-wanted

I like the raw heavyness of it it reminds me of rock

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KVRian
1493 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Post Fri Feb 19, 2021 6:17 pm

Some interesting stuff in there.
Improvements could be: intro was too long, it was 36 seconds and could be trimmed down.
From 36 - 1:47 section was too long without any significant change.
Your song is interesting because it seems like it tells a story.
Just needs about 2 minutes of fat trimming off and a better arrangement.

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