(Industrial) - Beelzebot
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- KVRian
- Topic Starter
- 682 posts since 4 Jun, 2018 from Wiltshire, Uk
Looking for some critique on this industrial number that I put together in fl studio
EDIT: DRUMS REMIXED https://youtu.be/FhDPHaCKEM0
ORIGINAL UPLOAD: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7WbDoPEaNdU
EDIT: DRUMS REMIXED https://youtu.be/FhDPHaCKEM0
ORIGINAL UPLOAD: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7WbDoPEaNdU
Last edited by frank1985 on Wed Apr 17, 2019 3:01 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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- KVRian
- 884 posts since 3 Jan, 2016
It has some interesting things going on but it kind of lacks energy. Maybe more drive from the percussion.
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- KVRAF
- 2362 posts since 17 Apr, 2004
Distort them! And maybe a snare with more weight?fastlanephil wrote: ↑Tue Apr 16, 2019 3:40 am [...] it kind of lacks energy. Maybe more drive from the percussion.
To me, the drums are letting the instruments down, because the music itself is nice. Good mix of keys and guitars and the interplay works. The drums sound like a bit of an afterthought. The other parts are so much more cohesive to my ears.
The drums sound cohesive as a unit too; the sound choices work together. It's the blend of melodic instruments and drums that I think is an issue here. Some more weight and dirtiness and grit to match the distorted guitar and moody piano.
It wouldn't need to be industrial per se; there's enough going on here to sound like some of the 90s trip hop a la Portishead or Massive Attack. Where again, the overall sound was more dirty and lofi than the clean drum machine sound you have going here. I guess I'm just missing some more dirt and grit and grind for something with the label "industrial".
I like what you've got, think it could still be improved!
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- KVRian
- Topic Starter
- 682 posts since 4 Jun, 2018 from Wiltshire, Uk
Thanks for the feedback folks, always appreciated. I've added a bit of grit to the drumkit to make it sound a bit more sleazy and lo-fi. Also more snap and weight to the snare. https://youtu.be/FhDPHaCKEM0sjm wrote: ↑Tue Apr 16, 2019 10:05 pmDistort them! And maybe a snare with more weight?fastlanephil wrote: ↑Tue Apr 16, 2019 3:40 am [...] it kind of lacks energy. Maybe more drive from the percussion.
To me, the drums are letting the instruments down, because the music itself is nice. Good mix of keys and guitars and the interplay works. The drums sound like a bit of an afterthought. The other parts are so much more cohesive to my ears.
The drums sound cohesive as a unit too; the sound choices work together. It's the blend of melodic instruments and drums that I think is an issue here. Some more weight and dirtiness and grit to match the distorted guitar and moody piano.
It wouldn't need to be industrial per se; there's enough going on here to sound like some of the 90s trip hop a la Portishead or Massive Attack. Where again, the overall sound was more dirty and lofi than the clean drum machine sound you have going here. I guess I'm just missing some more dirt and grit and grind for something with the label "industrial".
I like what you've got, think it could still be improved!
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- KVRAF
- 2362 posts since 17 Apr, 2004
I think that's an improvement. The difference between the instruments and drums is no longer jarring. You could probably go further in that direction if you wanted to; but don't have to IMO.
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- KVRAF
- 3959 posts since 10 Sep, 2010 from A shit hole (Ireland).
I don't consider this to be Industrial. But I think it's interesting...
I'm not mad about the piano because I think it would be a bit more aggressive if it were a synth (but that's personal preference).
I like the lead it sounds dissonant (which I like).
I think the drums lack a bit of punch compared to the other sounds (as people have already mentioned). I'd consider layering them up a bit perhaps. Too much distortion will start to make them abrasive if you're not careful.
I like the overall vibe tho'.
I'm not mad about the piano because I think it would be a bit more aggressive if it were a synth (but that's personal preference).
I like the lead it sounds dissonant (which I like).
I think the drums lack a bit of punch compared to the other sounds (as people have already mentioned). I'd consider layering them up a bit perhaps. Too much distortion will start to make them abrasive if you're not careful.
I like the overall vibe tho'.
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- KVRian
- Topic Starter
- 682 posts since 4 Jun, 2018 from Wiltshire, Uk
layering is a good idea, i'll give that a go, thanks for your feedbackRobmobius wrote: ↑Wed Apr 17, 2019 4:54 pm I don't consider this to be Industrial. But I think it's interesting...
I'm not mad about the piano because I think it would be a bit more aggressive if it were a synth (but that's personal preference).
I like the lead it sounds dissonant (which I like).
I think the drums lack a bit of punch compared to the other sounds (as people have already mentioned). I'd consider layering them up a bit perhaps. Too much distortion will start to make them abrasive if you're not careful.
I like the overall vibe tho'.