Two songs to share
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- Topic Starter
- 41 posts since 16 Mar, 2015
Apologies to anyone who had to listen to this. I'm sorry.
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- KVRAF
- 21196 posts since 8 Oct, 2014
My Feedback (Ghosts)
Music - 8.5
Instruments - 9
Performance - 8.5
Mix - 9.5
Overall - 8.875
Comments: Creepy sounding. I guess that's what you were going for. Good job. Think it would be good for a soundtrack of some kind.
Music - 8.5
Instruments - 9
Performance - 8.5
Mix - 9.5
Overall - 8.875
Comments: Creepy sounding. I guess that's what you were going for. Good job. Think it would be good for a soundtrack of some kind.
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- 41 posts since 16 Mar, 2015
It's really just a lucky accident that it isn't an atonal horrorshow. I will delete the soundcloud account and promise to never post again.
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- KVRAF
- 21196 posts since 8 Oct, 2014
My Feedback (Two Love Songs)
Music - 7
Instruments - 8.5
Performance - 8
Mix - 8.5
Overall - 8
Comments: Not as much into this as the first one. Too raunchy for my tastes. It's kind of like atmospheric metal, which doesn't quite work for me. For what it is, it's well done. Just not my cup of tea musically. That violin, or whatever it is, sounds either out of tune or warped. Probably done purposely. Very odd piece.
Music - 7
Instruments - 8.5
Performance - 8
Mix - 8.5
Overall - 8
Comments: Not as much into this as the first one. Too raunchy for my tastes. It's kind of like atmospheric metal, which doesn't quite work for me. For what it is, it's well done. Just not my cup of tea musically. That violin, or whatever it is, sounds either out of tune or warped. Probably done purposely. Very odd piece.
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- 41 posts since 16 Mar, 2015
I don't really know what I'm doing in any regard.wagtunes wrote: ↑Wed Jun 05, 2019 11:25 pm My Feedback (Two Love Songs)
Music - 7
Instruments - 8.5
Performance - 8
Mix - 8.5
Overall - 8
Comments: Not as much into this as the first one. Too raunchy for my tastes. It's kind of like atmospheric metal, which doesn't quite work for me. For what it is, it's well done. Just not my cup of tea musically. That violin, or whatever it is, sounds either out of tune or warped. Probably done purposely. Very odd piece.
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- KVRAF
- 11506 posts since 13 Mar, 2009 from UK
The first track (Ghosts) is quite gloomy, but in a pleasing way, if that makes any sense at all. The piece progresses in an unpredictable manner without sounding awkward or fragmented.
Good work
Good work
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- KVRAF
- 3390 posts since 5 Mar, 2004 from Gold Coast Australia
"Ghosts" starts nicely but by half way through I am losing interest as no melodic or narrative focus has developed which is a shame (for me) as the main sounds are nice and evocative. The drum line is average (as in they all sound like this). A melody would have had me hooked.
"Love Songs" starts in a similar vein but does develop that jarring "violin" which I like. Again though the concern for me is that you tend to create loops and sit on them instead of leading us through a similar/different landscape from variations. Overall tho this piece is better construction - if not exactly easy listening.
Both have a nice enough mix tone but I get the feeling that your pieces could really do with you starting with a melodic and narrative arrangement so you have a Story Arc - Home>Leaving>Adventure>Climax>Return. Then add the effects to support.
"Love Songs" starts in a similar vein but does develop that jarring "violin" which I like. Again though the concern for me is that you tend to create loops and sit on them instead of leading us through a similar/different landscape from variations. Overall tho this piece is better construction - if not exactly easy listening.
Both have a nice enough mix tone but I get the feeling that your pieces could really do with you starting with a melodic and narrative arrangement so you have a Story Arc - Home>Leaving>Adventure>Climax>Return. Then add the effects to support.
Benedict Roff-Marsh
http://www.benedictroffmarsh.com
http://www.benedictroffmarsh.com
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- KVRian
- 884 posts since 3 Jan, 2016
Both efforts seem to be going for horror genre soundtrack. As is I think they would work better supporting visuals than as a listening experience. If you want to create a stronger listening experience then try injecting sort of some musical ideas into all these sounds and effects which have some merit.
- KVRAF
- 11506 posts since 13 Mar, 2009 from UK
"Two Love Songs" - I can imagine the camera panning around a smouldering wasteland, eventually coming to rest at the sight of a blind violinist wearing a tattered raincoat, and sitting on what used to be a street-corner, hoping for a passer-by to throw some change into his upturned hat. Unfortunately, there haven't been any passers-by for weeks.
Good work
Good work
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- 41 posts since 16 Mar, 2015
I'm a lying piece of shit with no musical or academic background. Sorry.