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KVRist
123 posts since 14 Jul, 2006 from Australia

Post Tue Aug 03, 2021 10:54 pm

I produced this track with my friend Doobie Dangerfield, who wrote the score. Please feel free to leave a comment. Thanks for listening.
RMDX

https://soundcloud.com/rmdx/deep-down
Last edited by r1_000 on Wed Aug 11, 2021 8:59 am, edited 1 time in total.

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KVRist
291 posts since 18 May, 2021

Post Thu Aug 05, 2021 11:47 am

Nice. The percussion is overwhelming the other elements at times to me, but over all enjoyable track.
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KVRist

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123 posts since 14 Jul, 2006 from Australia

Post Tue Aug 10, 2021 9:14 pm

Thanks for the feedback eassae it's much appreciated. I think the whole mix is out of balance.

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KVRian
1308 posts since 23 Nov, 2018 from Birmingham, UK

Post Wed Aug 11, 2021 2:22 am

Was gonna have a listen...but it seems to have disappeared?
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KVRist

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123 posts since 14 Jul, 2006 from Australia

Post Wed Aug 11, 2021 3:28 am

Thanks for taking the time ChameleonMusic even though I took it down. I thought the mix was a bit off and I'm re doing it. Also waiting for a guitar part to mix in

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KVRian
1308 posts since 23 Nov, 2018 from Birmingham, UK

Post Wed Aug 11, 2021 7:01 am

r1_000 wrote:
Wed Aug 11, 2021 3:28 am
Thanks for taking the time ChameleonMusic even though I took it down. I thought the mix was a bit off and I'm re doing it. Also waiting for a guitar part to mix in
Fair enough!

Maybe change the title of the topic to 'deleted post' or something, so people know?
Mark Taylor, Chameleon Music - Professional composition and sound design for all media since 1994.

https://www.chameleonmusic.co.uk/

KVRist

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123 posts since 14 Jul, 2006 from Australia

Post Wed Aug 11, 2021 9:06 am

I've put track back on to SoundCloud with it remixed.

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KVRAF
1595 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Post Wed Aug 11, 2021 11:59 am

Some nice parts to it; good solid sound choices. Enjoyable :tu:
Arrangement could have been a touch better.

KVRist

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123 posts since 14 Jul, 2006 from Australia

Post Wed Aug 11, 2021 3:17 pm

Bansaw wrote:
Wed Aug 11, 2021 11:59 am
Some nice parts to it; good solid sound choices. Enjoyable :tu:
Arrangement could have been a touch better.
Thank you for your comments. I'm curious about what you don't like about the arrangement.
Feel free to elaborate further or not. Just listening and leaving a comment means a lot. Thanks again.

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KVRAF
1595 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Post Thu Aug 12, 2021 12:58 pm

r1_000 wrote:
Wed Aug 11, 2021 3:17 pm
Bansaw wrote:
Wed Aug 11, 2021 11:59 am
Some nice parts to it; good solid sound choices. Enjoyable :tu:
Arrangement could have been a touch better.
Thank you for your comments. I'm curious about what you don't like about the arrangement.
Feel free to elaborate further or not. Just listening and leaving a comment means a lot. Thanks again.
Inserting a few bars of, for example:
- different percussion elements (drop the kick out, or drop the snare out)
- a bridge with a different chord progression
- a drop out with just pads
- a filter (HP or LP) modulation
- add an element, fade another element out
- make one element the obvious focus
etc.

KVRist

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123 posts since 14 Jul, 2006 from Australia

Post Thu Aug 12, 2021 8:07 pm

Bansaw wrote:
Thu Aug 12, 2021 12:58 pm
r1_000 wrote:
Wed Aug 11, 2021 3:17 pm
Bansaw wrote:
Wed Aug 11, 2021 11:59 am
Some nice parts to it; good solid sound choices. Enjoyable :tu:
Arrangement could have been a touch better.
Thank you for your comments. I'm curious about what you don't like about the arrangement.
Feel free to elaborate further or not. Just listening and leaving a comment means a lot. Thanks again.
Inserting a few bars of, for example:
- different percussion elements (drop the kick out, or drop the snare out)
- a bridge with a different chord progression
- a drop out with just pads
- a filter (HP or LP) modulation
- add an element, fade another element out
- make one element the obvious focus
etc.
Thank you for taking the time to offer suggestions. I'll offer them to the other co-writer of the track next time we work on it.

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