WIP track Need some thoughts

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KVRist
37 posts since 16 Aug, 2020

Post Fri Sep 17, 2021 5:13 pm

Hey All, hope you are doing well.

Just need some thoughts on something im working on, have a listen.

https://soundcloud.com/whit3heart/licha ... lRujWrMVUS
Last edited by whit3h34rt on Fri Sep 17, 2021 7:35 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Boss Lovin' DR
8928 posts since 15 Mar, 2002 from the grimness of yorkshire

Post Fri Sep 17, 2021 5:51 pm

It says 'this track was not found..'

KVRist

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37 posts since 16 Aug, 2020

Post Fri Sep 17, 2021 7:36 pm

Sorry that was my bad :( i think it should work now
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KVRAF
7273 posts since 18 Aug, 2007 from NYC

Post Sat Sep 18, 2021 9:18 pm

You lost your energy after that first snare hit, and not to mention, that snare never came back. The rim hit won't cut it.

I know this is the fake master for our benefit but I would turn down the bass and create some more space in the body of the song.

The intro teases lots of space that completely disappears, replaced with a wall of sound. It needs room to breathe and you should find a way to bring the vocals back in more than just percussive snippets... It doesn't have to be a full-on vocal passage, but just throw a complete word in here or there to build up more tension to be resolved once you bring the vocals back in (repeat of the intro with drums).

I don't think I need to mention it much, but just in case... I'm hoping the snare riser is just a temp because it needs a crunchier snare (similar to that single snare hit).

Nice melodies in there. It's too early to say more about it but I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this.

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