Another vocal glitch/downtempo/pop work in progress.

[Danno]

This is very much a work in progress but it's also something I'm really excited about so I'd love some feedback. Thanks for listening!

https://soundcloud.com/kearley/dan-kear ... al_sharing

[eassae]

Seems like a good start. I like the bitcrush on the glitchy, panned percussion. The mix as it is now feels a little dominant toward the low end. Vocal sits well, and has nice delay and reverb.

[Danno]

Thank you for listening.

I think I subconsciously go for a woolly low end but it's easy to go too far. I'm not great at objectivity. I pulled back some low EQ on the bass synth part now and I do think it's better.

I like the chorus part, but I'm not sure if my verse is worth keeping. I'll give it some space and revisit when I (hopefully) have fresh ears.

[crimsonwarlock]

I'm not great at objectivity.

One word: Reference Tracks (if you say is quick, it's one word ).

[Hezekiel]

A very good start. I like how you use a lot of rests in the good melodies

[donkey tugger]

I like that - some nice ideas and no obvious flaws in the mixing.

What I did think though is that arrangement wise it never really takes off in terms of upping the dynamics. Most obviously for me it's crying out for a proper snare (and possibly tambourine/shaker/hi-hat 16ths?) in the 2nd and third choruses to really drive and lift it!

[mjolnir]

the mix sounds great on my little desk speakers.
overall, i like your vocal style. the kick drum is well controlled too.
you got a really powerful tune there. it must've taken a LOT of work to get that mix quality.

during the break near the end of the tune, the vocals seem a bit too loud compared to their levels during the rest of the tune.
but i understand that as a compressor leveler type of thing.

overall sounds great.

[enroe]

Well, that's a nice start. I don't know what's missing: the verses and chorus
are already there. Very beautifully sung, lots of emotion. Very well done!

[crimsonwarlock]

I like this a lot and the mix is pretty impressive (I envy your vocal processing, just wow). But while listening, I keep waiting for the track to explode into epicenes, as it constantly hints at something coming. I would suggest starting building up from the middle part, and then going all out in the final verse.

[Danno]

Thanks again people. I didn’t realize there were comments since my last post.

So I think I’ve finished it now.. the 2nd verse is in place and I guess the mix is as good as I’m going to get it.
I also wanted it to take off in a bigger way so now the choruses hit into a liquid DnB kind of thing.

The original SoundCloud link is the new mix. I’d have the old one up for reference but I don’t have room left on SC.

Thanks again for listening.

[donkey tugger]

That's what I meant! Nailed it..

Now, I'm usually of the 'always leave 'em wanting more' school of writing, but I reckon that last chorus could be twice as long - maybe with the first half stripped back to just drums/bass/vocals. Little arrangement tricks like that always make things stand out; the old fairy dust..

[Danno]

Fairy dust:
https://youtu.be/En4ase-1-FA

[donkey tugger]

Excellent! My work's head office is in Bristol - well used to the oooar accents.

[Danno]

K, I took your chorus extension advice, with some different layers kicking in. Thanks for the input!

[mjolnir]

where's the link?