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Kraku
KVRian
1408 posts since 13 Oct, 2003 from Prague, Czech Republic

Post Thu Jul 15, 2010 2:45 am

A new track from me.

Too bad that Alison Goldfrapp couldn't make it on time to do the vocals so I had to replace her parts with a synthesizer ;)

If We Knew What We Are

All feedback is very welcome.

Can you spot the real analogue synths and the digital ones in this song? It has both of them.


PS. The three note high playing instrument in the 5 sec mark should be a high violin kind of instrument, but M-Tron Pro refused to play notes that high :(


EDIT:
If you can write good lyrics, please have a go with this song. I want to have a version of this song with vocals in it.
Last edited by Kraku on Fri Jul 16, 2010 12:32 pm, edited 2 times in total.

nikosb
KVRer
18 posts since 25 May, 2007

Post Thu Jul 15, 2010 12:06 pm

I don't understand why I'm the first one to comment, this is really great! The melody is great, the orchestration is fantastic. This really needs a singer and it will shine. I love the (mellotron?) choirs, the synth strings, the pop song structure.

Don't really have any suggestions, I just think that making it a few bpm's slower to give it a more laidback feel, and making the percussion more synthetic/analog sounding would make it even greater. But, really, just record a nice vocal on top, and it's ready.

I love it, great work!

s4w2th
KVRist
401 posts since 31 May, 2004 from Standing right behind you. Booga! Booga!

Post Fri Jul 16, 2010 12:56 am

:wink:
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Feed the glow.

Maadfoo
KVRist
305 posts since 27 Apr, 2005 from right beside you

Post Fri Jul 16, 2010 1:18 am

Great songs...reminds me a bit of the electroclash-times in 2001 or so. I really like it. especially the dirty strings...

Kraku
KVRian
1408 posts since 13 Oct, 2003 from Prague, Czech Republic

Post Fri Jul 16, 2010 1:29 am

Here's the gear list btw:

Software:

Logic Pro 9
Sylenth1
M-Tron Pro
EWQL Symphonic Choirs
Glue
KR-Delay FS

Hardware:

Future Retro XS
Eurorack Modular synth


The main bass sound, lead melody and the random sound effect came from the analogue synths. Everything else was software.

Kraku
KVRian
1408 posts since 13 Oct, 2003 from Prague, Czech Republic

Post Fri Jul 16, 2010 1:33 am

BTW. Would someone be interested to write lyrics for this song so I can hand them to a singer and record the vocals sometime in the future?

Maadfoo
KVRist
305 posts since 27 Apr, 2005 from right beside you

Post Fri Jul 16, 2010 1:38 am

Kraku wrote:BTW. Would someone be interested to write lyrics for this song so I can hand them to a singer and record the vocals sometime in the future?
No, but I would be interested in remixing this...if you're interested

Kraku
KVRian
1408 posts since 13 Oct, 2003 from Prague, Czech Republic

Post Fri Jul 16, 2010 12:30 pm

Maybe after I've managed to get the vocal version of this song ready :)

1josephjohn
KVRer
1 posts since 20 Apr, 2011 from USA

Post Wed Apr 20, 2011 3:02 pm

These lyrics don't match you song but I am offering them to you for any other song .
I am looking to sell these lyrics:

"Trinity"
I want you to be my June wife,
I want to wake up with you after every morning noon and night,
I want to see your beautiful smile waiting for me at the door frame,
I don't care what people say. Sure I'm lame,
I want to embrace your fiery four foot frame,
I don't want to hurt you I'm not a player nor do I have game,
I want to be a part of your family I assure you this feeling is to remain,
I won't give out your number I swear on everything and / or my name,


By 1josephjohn

© 2011 1josephjohn (All rights reserved)

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mellotronaut
KVRAF
9879 posts since 2 Jan, 2005 from somewhere in the woods

Post Wed Apr 20, 2011 3:05 pm

this is a great song! :clap: it has the Goldfrapp touch, indeed :)
"It dreamed itself along"

bstageboss
KVRist
289 posts since 11 Sep, 2004 from just a little to the left

Post Wed Apr 20, 2011 4:50 pm

Kraku wrote:BTW. Would someone be interested to write lyrics for this song so I can hand them to a singer and record the vocals sometime in the future?
Just heard the song after this thread got resurrected. Definitely brilliant melody writing! Are you still looking for lyrics for this?


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welshwitch
KVRer
1 posts since 10 Jul, 2011

Post Sun Jul 10, 2011 9:33 am

Ahoyhoy, not sure if these lyrics fit but thought they got the theme of the song pretty well (:

Are we real?
or were we made up by machines?
Are we the dreams of calculators
On the stages inside tv screens?

If we knew what we are
Maybe we would go far
In a world where computers ruled
If we knew what we are
We'd stop wishing on stars
And we'd no-longer be fooled

Are we sacred?
Is anything sacred here?
Has God become a tape cassette
When its CDs that blare in your ear?

If we knew what we are
Maybe we would go far
In a world where computers ruled
If we knew what we are
We'd stop wishing on stars
And we'd no-longer be fooled

Are you listening?
Can you hear us scream?
Stuck behind the circuit board
As we disintegrate at the seams

If we knew what we are
Maybe we would go far
In a world where computers ruled
If we knew what we are
We'd stop wishing on stars
And we'd no-longer be fooled

koalaboy
KVRAF
1782 posts since 18 Mar, 2006 from Plymouth, UK

Post Sun Jul 10, 2011 9:55 am

Nice Song.

[chorus]
What would we be,
If we could see,
Where life will take us.

Where would we go
If we should know,
What lies beyond (here).

:D

Edit: Just noticed the date :roll: Well, you never know :wink:

kelvyn
KVRian
1052 posts since 9 Mar, 2008 from netherlands

Post Sun Jul 10, 2011 10:18 am

What happened to the song? Was it ever finished? It's what Goldfrapp should be doing... so I'm really curious to hear how it turned out.

bstageboss
KVRist
289 posts since 11 Sep, 2004 from just a little to the left

Post Mon Jul 11, 2011 9:42 am

kelvyn wrote:What happened to the song? Was it ever finished? It's what Goldfrapp should be doing... so I'm really curious to hear how it turned out.
I don't think he's monitoring this topic anymore. I've put up some lyrics on his youtube site a little while ago, but he seems to have lost interest.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sa2KIdrajz4


The comment section where I posted my take on the lyrics came out garbled, so I'll throw them up here just in case anyone was interested...:shrug:

Couldn't bear the
apathy in
your face

Indecision
caught me in a
dark place

Would we be here
if we'd gone much too far

What would happen
if we knew what we are

Should I be sad
if it was fair
that I'm still living

Would it be bad
if no one cared
what I was giving

in the city
cruel snow keeps
falling

In my memory
distant voices
calling

I still search for
distant light from your star

What would happen
if we knew what we are

Should I be sad
if it was fair
that I'm still living

Would it be bad
if no one cared
what I was giving

Should I be sad
if it was fair
that I'm still living

Would it be bad
if no one cared
what I was giving


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