off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

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artificial
KVRian
586 posts since 15 Oct, 2008

Post Thu Feb 22, 2018 4:04 am

Hello all,

it has been quite a long time, but here's my newest track.

https://soundcloud.com/offtheshore/a-place-to-go

I hope you guys like it!

All the best and thanks for listening! :)

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layzer
KVRAF
5736 posts since 11 Jun, 2006

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Thu Feb 22, 2018 4:45 am

cool, chill tune. i thought there was too much overdrive type distortion on everything making the whole thing fuzzy, we want a balance of crystal clear to compliment the distortion. mostly enjoyed :tu:
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KVRian
586 posts since 15 Oct, 2008

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Thu Feb 22, 2018 8:22 am

Thanks for the feedback! :) Actually I wanted the track to be kinda fuzzy and distorted, but blended with with some softer sounds to create some kind of contrast. But I'm gonna think about it again when I find some time! :tu:

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vurt
addled muppet weed
38347 posts since 26 Jan, 2003 from through the looking glass

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Thu Feb 22, 2018 10:33 am

i partly agree with layzer, the mix needs something a little forward to balance the spectrum. where i differ is im not sure "crystal clear" is necessary. either could work, id give both a try and see what you feel :)

maybe just give the piano sound a shorter attack so its more natural sounding, and pull back on the eq as its got no highs left at all, so at the moment it almost just blends in.


compositionally, everything sounds good though, so the important part is right! :tu:
just a few mix tweaks

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KVRian
586 posts since 15 Oct, 2008

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Sat Feb 24, 2018 9:09 am

Cool, thanks for the suggestions and the nice words! ;-) I'm gonna rework the mix based on both of your suggestions! :-) Your comments really help me a lot! So, thanks again, guys!!

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Frantz
KVRAF
4841 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Sun Feb 25, 2018 9:18 am

Great tune! Moody and atmospheric.

I am fine with the mix but I suppose a little more clarity wouldn't hurt.

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htcnext2
KVRist
269 posts since 3 Jul, 2017 from Austria

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Sun Feb 25, 2018 1:09 pm

The synthlines and the piano work well, good composition, maybe the fillers could be a bit louder, generaly the mix is a bit taken back. But no problem. Nice track.

Zexila
KVRAF
3178 posts since 18 Mar, 2008

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Sun Feb 25, 2018 1:28 pm

Enjoyed it quite a bit, had this thing in my head, rainy day, you look outside of the window thinking "is this all I got", than look around room, picture of your ex, no more booze left in the bottle, then you just fold down in corner and cry good minute... good times. :scared:
This entire forum is wading through predictions, opinions, barely formed thoughts, drama, and whining. If you don't enjoy that, why are you here? :D ShawnG

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KVRian
586 posts since 15 Oct, 2008

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Wed Feb 28, 2018 6:16 am

Thanks for the comments, guys! ;-)

@Zexila: Actually I have this feeling that this track is one of the more optimistic ones! But yeah, just can't get rid of the melancholy... :scared: :)

Unreflected
KVRist
88 posts since 13 Jun, 2015

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Wed Feb 28, 2018 10:56 pm

Very pleasant, powerful, just love it.
Thanks.

artificial
KVRian
586 posts since 15 Oct, 2008

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Sat Mar 03, 2018 2:34 am

Unreflected wrote:Very pleasant, powerful, just love it.
Thanks.
Thank you for the nice words! :-)

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biodiode
KVRist
422 posts since 23 Sep, 2003 from UK

Re: off the shore - a place to go [indietronica]

Post Sat Mar 03, 2018 2:56 am

Very nicely done, laidback but powerful in its own sweet way.
Check out more of my work at https://www.biodiode.com where you will find tips, tricks on the blog and more of my compositions.

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