KVR Audio

hivkorn · Post by **hivkorn** » Sat Apr 21, 2018 10:15 am

https://soundcloud.com/user-319698205/reve-de-luciole

sjm · Post by **sjm** » Sat Apr 21, 2018 10:43 pm

Very moody! The spooky/haunting/sombre sounds underline the overall atmosphere well.

But it sounds a bit muffled, which may or may not be on purpose. At any rate, I personally feel there needs to be a bit more spread to the sound, it's a bit 1 dimensional.

It's also a bit minimalistic, and maybe more so than the atmosphere dictates. I get it that there's not going to be a lot of fanfares and offbeat rhythms, but maybe a sorrowful melody on a violin/flute/synth/theremin could be added? Overall - which ties in with the muffled sound too - there's something missing on the top of the piece. It seems to be missing a melody line in a higher register.

So I'd encourage you to give this one another look when you've got enough distance for a new perspective. Then you can see if you agree with this assessment or not.

There's much more potential in here I think, as you've laid the foundations for what could be a very nice little mood piece.

hivkorn · Post by **hivkorn** » Sun Apr 22, 2018 7:05 am

sjm wrote:Very moody! The spooky/haunting/sombre sounds underline the overall atmosphere well.

But it sounds a bit muffled, which may or may not be on purpose. At any rate, I personally feel there needs to be a bit more spread to the sound, it's a bit 1 dimensional.

It's also a bit minimalistic, and maybe more so than the atmosphere dictates. I get it that there's not going to be a lot of fanfares and offbeat rhythms, but maybe a sorrowful melody on a violin/flute/synth/theremin could be added? Overall - which ties in with the muffled sound too - there's something missing on the top of the piece. It seems to be missing a melody line in a higher register.

So I'd encourage you to give this one another look when you've got enough distance for a new perspective. Then you can see if you agree with this assessment or not.

There's much more potential in here I think, as you've laid the foundations for what could be a very nice little mood piece.

for your review , yes this song miss something , but beside my try to complete it with something else the best result was this version, i mean it sound exactly how i feel at the time i wrote this song..i have a few other song that i am working on it and maybe the other e will sound more 'full'

Thx.

srv-musikmaker · Post by **srv-musikmaker** » Sun Apr 22, 2018 11:55 am

I like this as it is. However, fuller sounds would do justice to it. Maybe add a 1-2 elements or a bit of reverb

hivkorn · Post by **hivkorn** » Sun Apr 22, 2018 2:07 pm

You re right i am working on the sound on this song

.new version will come with some improvements.
Thx for listening

htcnext2 · Post by **htcnext2** » Sun Apr 22, 2018 5:53 pm

A bit of a sad tune, but it's ok for me. Which fathom do you mean, the free mono? Nice work.
Greetings
HM

hivkorn · Post by **hivkorn** » Sun Apr 22, 2018 9:47 pm

the full version

Everything is mono but this is the full version

Thx for listenning.

TrekStar · Post by **TrekStar** » Tue Apr 24, 2018 4:53 pm

I like that minimalistic composition and soundchoice. hypnotic in a positive way!
I bought fathom, too...but we never became friends.
cheers!
wolf

hivkorn · Post by **hivkorn** » Tue Apr 24, 2018 5:08 pm

Thx for listening

layzer · Post by **layzer** » Tue Apr 24, 2018 5:09 pm

srv-musikmaker wrote:I like this as it is. However, fuller sounds would do justice to it. Maybe add a 1-2 elements or a bit of reverb

agreed, given the predominant atmospheric nature of the piece, in your face, dry sounds seem a bit out of place. my 2 bits.

hivkorn · Post by **hivkorn** » Tue Apr 24, 2018 5:18 pm

layzer wrote:
srv-musikmaker wrote:I like this as it is. However, fuller sounds would do justice to it. Maybe add a 1-2 elements or a bit of reverb
agreed, given the predominant atmospheric nature of the piece, in your face, dry sounds seem a bit out of place. my 2 bits.

I am working on a new version