Frantz wrote:Another very cool song. The little bouncy rhythms are fantastic.
You have a tendency to write choruses that don't stand out enough from the verses. It's not a big issue on this song but this is the 3rd song where I've noticed this. Maybe on the next song you could start the chorus on a previously unheard chord and have some higher vocal notes in the chorus?
That's an interesting observation that got me thinking. It's true that I've posted a few things here that don't have a big difference in sound. I think that's because I've recently begun experimenting more with subtle chord substitutions and the like rather than writing a more traditional verse section and chorus section. Back when I started out, almost everything I wrote had 2 very distinct sections.
I think that this is part of the "simplification" process I started relatively recently. Before that, I went through a phase of writing songs with multiple sections, loads of extended chords etc., and was coming to the point where I thought I was overcomplicating things. A lot of the stuff I listened to during my teenage years really just consisted of one simple progression repeated over the course of the song. So I guess I went back to basics there. Once again, the chords in the various sections (apart from the bridge) are similar, but not exactly the same.
So it's not like I only have been writing songs with this formula, just that the ones I've posted here all seem to have this commonality (and not necessarily on purpose). You could try something like this
for something with a maybe more traditional chorus/verse thing. I'd be surprised if you felt the same way about them. Note that I don't consider either of these quite finished yet. The first one is pretty close to being done, the second one is distorting in the chorus and still needs some TLC. The mix is also a bit of a mess in general.
I don't think the "This party is going down" section really works to be honest. I'm not sure if I'm getting distracted by the sidechained guitars or perhaps the vocal part is less compelling than the other vocals in this song.
Despite all of that, I did enjoy this song. The above is meant to be constructive feedback.
I'm wondering - and hoping for feedback on the IL forum about this, where they've heard earlier versions - whether I ended up sapping a bit of energy out of the bridge when I automated the volume on the vocal takes. My initial impression was that a bit of the punch was gone; but I wasn't 100% sure. I was mainly trying to tame the popping Ps on things like "party", because it could get quite loud with 3 vocal tracks at once. So maybe I just need to take a look at this section again. It might simply be a case of turning up the volume to compensate for the automation.