Narcissus - Shiny Bedroom Pop

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nineofkings
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1758 posts since 9 Apr, 2011

Post Thu May 31, 2018 12:49 pm

The gf and I knocked out a 3-track EP in 3 days. This is track one. It's some late-90s, early 2000s guitar pop, somewhere between Weezer and Kelly Clarkson: https://soundcloud.com/merrymerrysounds/narcissus

All instruments and vocals were recorded through my little old Fast Track except the drums, which are LinnDrum samples. Recorded, mixed and mastered in REAPER as always.

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wagtunes
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13612 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

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Post Thu May 31, 2018 2:29 pm

As soon as I saw Weezer I had to listen. Yep, that's Weezer all right.

Well done. Loved it.

experimental.crow
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5551 posts since 9 Mar, 2003 from The Druid Hills

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Post Fri Jun 01, 2018 5:43 am

this is very good , which really , i have come to expect from you ...
solid writing and arrangement ... good chops ...
your production standards are admirable ...
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thomekk
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2445 posts since 3 May, 2003 from Germany

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Post Fri Jun 01, 2018 6:35 am

:clap: Very nice and very catchy!
Good song and a well crafted, transparent mix. I also like the instrumental part.
Thanks for sharing :tu:
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sjm
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1729 posts since 17 Apr, 2004

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Post Fri Jun 01, 2018 6:38 am

I would posit that another distorted rhythm guitar or two would help really get that Weezer sound. To my ears, the distorted guitar is lacking that big creamy fatness that Weezer always had that comes from multiple guitar parts.

Still like it of course.
Voted KVR's resident drunk Robert Smith impersonator (thanks Frantz!)

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Frantz
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4820 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

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Post Fri Jun 01, 2018 5:20 pm

Great tune. Vox and guitars sound good. Amazing for a 3 day effort. Still I wish it had some more interesting sounds or surprises.

I am missing key words in the lyrics. Would you consider posting the lyrics on Soundcloud or making the vox louder?

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donkey tugger
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4869 posts since 15 Mar, 2002 from the grimness of yorkshire

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Post Sat Jun 02, 2018 1:50 pm

Excellent stuff. As Steve said above, if you're really wanting to go for that Weezer sound then some more high-gain geetars would be the order of the day. I like it as it is though without them...must be getting old... :o

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nineofkings
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1758 posts since 9 Apr, 2011

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Post Mon Jun 04, 2018 11:46 am

wagtunes wrote:As soon as I saw Weezer I had to listen. Yep, that's Weezer all right.

Well done. Loved it.
Thanks! It was kind of an accidental similarity but once I heard it I couldn't un-hear it.

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nineofkings
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Post Thu Jun 07, 2018 10:43 am

Frantz wrote:Great tune. Vox and guitars sound good. Amazing for a 3 day effort. Still I wish it had some more interesting sounds or surprises.

I am missing key words in the lyrics. Would you consider posting the lyrics on Soundcloud or making the vox louder?
Thanks! Here are the lyrics:
Lately I've been thinking of your gaze when I'm alone
On sunny afternoons when skies are blue and I'm walking home
Lately late at night I think of you and lie awake
Every time I catch the moon reflected on the bay

[Chorus]
'Cause everywhere I look I'm missing your face
Everything reflects Narcissus always
I try to shut it out, I struggle in vain
Everything's about Narcissus I can't get away

I'm always alone but I am never not with you
No one understands the harsh demands you hold me to
Dying to get a view of deepest blues and stormy grays
Trying to meet your eyes I find I'm drowning in your gaze

[Chorus] x2

[Chorus] x2


EP is out now: https://merrymerry.bandcamp.com/releases

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Frantz
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4820 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

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Post Thu Jun 07, 2018 5:04 pm

Thanks. :tu:

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seismic1
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9044 posts since 13 Mar, 2009 from UK

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Post Sun Jun 10, 2018 4:07 pm

Great songwriting. The verse and chorus are a great "natural" fit and the song flows very well. I wasn't really familiar with Weezer, but I thought this had a similar feel to some of the tracks on the first Rosenbergs album. Catchy stuff.

Good work :)

fastlanephil
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619 posts since 3 Jan, 2016

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Post Sun Jun 10, 2018 4:36 pm

Sounds like commercial potential here!

Some of the lyrics don’t immediately grab for a pop tune but they’re interesting. Something like ABBA’s Cassandra?

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