Chemeleon - Lonestar

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chemeleon
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39 posts since 16 Jan, 2013

Post Wed Jun 06, 2018 11:38 pm

https://soundcloud.com/chemeleon/lonestar

Hi. I wrote a song. Are the levels and eq ok? Is it worth listening to more than once or more than partially?
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wagtunes
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13400 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Thu Jun 07, 2018 3:46 am

Question: Is this the first song you've ever written?

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chemeleon
KVRist
39 posts since 16 Jan, 2013

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Thu Jun 07, 2018 6:56 pm

No, probably around the 120th.
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wagtunes
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13400 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Thu Jun 07, 2018 6:57 pm

chemeleon wrote:No, probably around the 120th.
Okay, um, I don't think it's a good idea for me to comment on this. Hopefully, somebody else will.

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layzer
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5541 posts since 11 Jun, 2006

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Thu Jun 07, 2018 7:35 pm

wagtunes wrote:
chemeleon wrote:No, probably around the 120th.
Okay, um, I don't think it's a good idea for me to comment on this. Hopefully, somebody else will.
ok Wags, i'll bite. it was interesting, but i think it needs more Fausage Sattener:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A2R937K_CyI
could also perhaps use much more reverb
:phones:
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chemeleon
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39 posts since 16 Jan, 2013

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Thu Jun 07, 2018 7:42 pm

Hmm. Well, it's all the rage these days. Maybe you'll like this one better?

https://soundcloud.com/chemeleon/emc
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layzer
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5541 posts since 11 Jun, 2006

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Thu Jun 07, 2018 7:47 pm

chemeleon wrote:Hmm. Well, it's all the rage these days. Maybe you'll like this one better?

https://soundcloud.com/chemeleon/emc
no, sorry :uhuhuh:
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chemeleon
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39 posts since 16 Jan, 2013

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Thu Jun 07, 2018 7:51 pm

Ah, ok. Thanks for the advice anyway
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Eauson
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836 posts since 9 Jan, 2013 from morf

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Fri Jun 08, 2018 12:41 am

Fo me personally there seems to be a lack of focus, its either the idm elements or the vocal, both don't seem to be able to sit comfortably together in the production that you seem to want to achieve. A good reference to me is afx minipops, which has a really nice balance, I would probably prefer to listen to the instrumental than the fuil vocal buts that's a personal preference.
Not sure this helps, but hey, you did ask :)
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wagtunes
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13400 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Fri Jun 08, 2018 3:08 am

I know I'm going to regret this. The reason I asked if this was the first song you ever wrote is because there is absolutely no structure to that track. It just meanders on all over the place. No direction. No anything. I don't even know what it's doing or trying to do. Is there a verse? Is there a chorus? Did you just randomly hit notes on the keyboard?

Sorry, but that's what it sounded like to me. Somebody who has absolutely zero knowledge of how to compose a piece of music.

Now, if this was intentional (like a genre thing) then well done. Mission accomplished. But it was just too chaotic and all over the place for me.

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thecontrolcentre
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23021 posts since 27 Jul, 2005 from the wilds of wanny

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Fri Jun 08, 2018 3:43 am

chemeleon wrote:Hmm. Well, it's all the rage these days.
Oh yeah?

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chemeleon
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39 posts since 16 Jan, 2013

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Fri Jun 08, 2018 4:10 am

wagtunes wrote:I know I'm going to regret this. The reason I asked if this was the first song you ever wrote is because there is absolutely no structure to that track. It just meanders on all over the place. No direction. No anything. I don't even know what it's doing or trying to do. Is there a verse? Is there a chorus? Did you just randomly hit notes on the keyboard?

Sorry, but that's what it sounded like to me. Somebody who has absolutely zero knowledge of how to compose a piece of music.

Now, if this was intentional (like a genre thing) then well done. Mission accomplished. But it was just too chaotic and all over the place for me.
No, thank you, that's exactly what I needed. I form my compositions around loops generally, I get so used to hearing them over and over I forget that variation and structure are what people expect. The way I compose, perhaps it'd be better if I concentrated on more dance oriented music, but I am very much drawn to interesting harmony and complex rhythms as well. Hence the rather unique style of composition.
Eauson wrote:Fo me personally there seems to be a lack of focus, its either the idm elements or the vocal, both don't seem to be able to sit comfortably together in the production that you seem to want to achieve. A good reference to me is afx minipops, which has a really nice balance, I would probably prefer to listen to the instrumental than the fuil vocal buts that's a personal preference.
Not sure this helps, but hey, you did ask :)
Yes, I probably need to sit down with somebody and learn some mastering techniques, right now it's all done by ear with what I've learned over the years, things like phase issues and giving things space in the mix / letting them breathe doesn't come easy to me. Perhaps I'll render out an instrumental later.
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Eauson
KVRian
836 posts since 9 Jan, 2013 from morf

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Fri Jun 08, 2018 6:55 am

After listening again, it seems that a reduction in volume would help and the vocal could be miss timed, when it first comes in at 24 could probably be better placed a few seconds earlier at 22 and as you have fx on the vocal, maybe some stretching to fit more comfortably in places. My reason for an instrumental was down to the structure/flow of the track, the breakdowns, the moments when you want the audience/listener to move with your sonic instruction, this maybe what people call composition, I don't know. This could be completely off, because if you listen to anything I make you may question my 2bob advice :D
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layzer
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5541 posts since 11 Jun, 2006

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Fri Jun 08, 2018 1:35 pm

thecontrolcentre wrote:
chemeleon wrote:Hmm. Well, it's all the rage these days.
Oh yeah?
yeah, it is ..because everyone is listening to music on tiny little smartphone speakers requiring audio to be squashed and amped up as much as possible to hear anything :idea:
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Unreflected
KVRist
87 posts since 13 Jun, 2015

Re: Chemeleon - Lonestar

Post Sat Jun 09, 2018 3:36 pm

About your question.
No!
I couldn't stand it 20 seconds.

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