Exclamations of a child ( electronic)

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Eauson
KVRian
837 posts since 9 Jan, 2013 from morf

Post Fri Jun 22, 2018 3:28 am

Hello,

https://soundcloud.com/eauson/exclamations-of-a-child

A day in the life of hyperactivity, because that's the way that life goes...
Comments and feedback appreciated

:)
Last edited by Eauson on Fri Jun 22, 2018 9:32 am, edited 4 times in total.
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wagtunes
KVRAF
13612 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Re: Exclamations of a child

Post Fri Jun 22, 2018 3:36 am

My Feedback

Music - 7.5
Instruments - 8
Performance - 8.5
Mix - 7

Overall - 7.75

Comments: Quirky little tune. Something almost kid like about it. Bass a little muddy, at least on my system. Mix also could have a tad more air. Would have liked a little more development of theme. All in all, not bad. Enjoyed listening.

ChamMusic
KVRian
893 posts since 12 Jun, 2006

Re: Exclamations of a child ( electronic)

Post Fri Jun 22, 2018 6:03 am

As Wag says: definitely 'quirky'!

Great overall groove created...infectious!

The hectic opening riffs needed to stop a lot earlier for me...I would've liked them to drop out at around 30 seconds or so, leaving the drums, bass and pad / chords to support a newly entered more chilled and singable, catchy melody...then the hectic bits could have come in again to good effect as a contrasting section?

Definitely needs a serious contrasting, more chilled section at some point for my ears...the quirky, warbling just gets too much after a while!

Definitely has potential.

Eauson
KVRian
837 posts since 9 Jan, 2013 from morf

Re: Exclamations of a child ( electronic)

Post Fri Jun 22, 2018 9:29 am

wagtunes wrote:My Feedback



Overall - 7.75

Comments: Quirky .
Something almost kid like about it.
Bass a little muddy, at least on my system.
Mix also could have a tad more air.
Would have liked a little more development of theme. All in all, not bad. Enjoyed listening.
Many thanks, it was a bit of a jam session when it was originally made, so there are elements which need to be developed, its a departure from my usual, as mix had finalised treatment outside of daw. Will assess on some other speakers and look to improve :)
ChamMusic wrote:As Wag says: definitely 'quirky'!

Great overall groove created...infectious!

The hectic opening riffs needed to stop a lot earlier for me...I would've liked them to drop out at around 30 seconds or so, leaving the drums, bass and pad / chords to support a newly entered more chilled and singable, catchy melody...then the hectic bits could have come in again to good effect as a contrasting section?

Definitely needs a serious contrasting, more chilled section at some point for my ears...the quirky, warbling just gets too much after a while definitely has potential.
Many thanks, yes there are elements that are a bit overwhelming, I should have included the writeup in my original post which is on soundcloud ( which i will paste above) as it somewhat explains the nature of the track and my thinking, hyperactive formative years :)
Will, look again at the structure and see if I can calm it down a bit, a little like my mum in the department store thrashing around on the floor, mimicking my disruptive behaviour.
That seemed to get my attention :D
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