ambient acoustic w/ beats "April Rains Again"

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KVRAF
2663 posts since 28 Oct, 2007 from michigan

Post Sun Apr 07, 2019 6:54 pm

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KVRAF
20502 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Post Sun Apr 07, 2019 7:28 pm

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Music - 7
Instruments - 7
Performance - 7
Mix - 7

Overall - 7

Comments: So I hear a nice 70s style intro and I'm thinking, "Okay, couple of bars, now we come in with the vocals." Nope. All I get is that chord progression (two chords) with some incidental sounds around it. Then 2 minutes in, we go off in a totally different direction with a riff. Still waiting for some kind of melody. Nope, not happening. Then we go back to the 2 chords again to finish this thing up.

Is writing an actual song something people just don't do anymore? I mean if I'm a dinosaur, tell me I'm a dinosaur and I'll stop listening to the stuff posted here.

Aside from the incomplete musical ideas, the mix is dull. Needs a little EQ. The sounds around the guitar chords are so in the background that they might as well not even be there. They make very little impact.

The one plus, the guitar tone is very nice. I hear so much potential here and every time I hear stuff like this (which is almost all the time at this forum) I just want to start throwing furniture around the house.

At least it wasn't a beat.

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KVRAF
7684 posts since 11 Jun, 2006

Post Sun Apr 07, 2019 8:43 pm

laying on a hammock on some tropical island drinking a non-alcoholic beverage with a little umbrella in it.

but.....

yeah, needs more Wagbell. :idea:
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KVRAF
7024 posts since 21 Dec, 2002 from MD USA

Post Sun Apr 07, 2019 9:06 pm

Wags people don't make whole songs anymore, they make "beats" :hihi:


but to this song, it's not bad but for sure could be more interesting II guess.
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KVRAF

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2663 posts since 28 Oct, 2007 from michigan

Post Sun Apr 07, 2019 9:22 pm

wagtunes wrote:
Sun Apr 07, 2019 7:28 pm
... I mean if I'm a dinosaur, tell me I'm a dinosaur and I'll stop listening to the stuff posted here ...
OK - you're a dinosaur

thx for your notes - your numbers might mean something to you Wags but really . . .

I made this recording for me primarily as an Aloha to my 'ol Gurian mated to a(relatively) new microphone - this does not have "song" structure as we know it obviously. Kinda in the "sharing" mood. It might, at some point, develop song structure(perhaps w/vocal) but not today - it is what it is
snapshot

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KVRAF
7024 posts since 21 Dec, 2002 from MD USA

Post Sun Apr 07, 2019 9:27 pm

it was pretty good. Just doesn't give the feel that you worked extra hard on it to make it an awesome completed piece of work.
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KVRAF

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2663 posts since 28 Oct, 2007 from michigan

Post Sun Apr 07, 2019 9:29 pm

you're right ATS - not complete yet . . .
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KVRAF

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2663 posts since 28 Oct, 2007 from michigan

Post Sun Apr 07, 2019 9:36 pm

I'll go ahead & withdraw this post if you guys think only completely formed and recorded pieces are supposed to be submitted here . . .
that's not what I think the month of April is - it's more dis-continent that that

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KVRAF
7684 posts since 11 Jun, 2006

Post Sun Apr 07, 2019 9:42 pm

the good thing is, unlike a movie you pay to see at the theatre..
you expect a build up to a climax with twists and turns in between
you leave either feeling you got your moneys worth or ripped off.
in here its like watching a parade go by... oh that was cool... WTF was that?....
that sucked... next!!!!!

dont sweat it, Mn, it was better than alot of stuff i seen go by.... :wink:
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KVRAF
2943 posts since 3 Nov, 2015

Post Mon Apr 08, 2019 4:04 pm

wagtunes wrote:
Sun Apr 07, 2019 7:28 pm
Is writing an actual song something people just don't do anymore? I mean if I'm a dinosaur, tell me I'm a dinosaur and I'll stop listening to the stuff posted here.
Come on ! How can you even consider to be a dinosaur when you have listened and commented favorably on an abstract piece of mine recently, "We See No Rack" ?

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This said, "April Rains Again" is indeed on the sketchy side of things. At such a very early stage, where no bridge has yet really been found to blend the two very different sections, it's not tempting to work on a mix, and so the mix is pretty much on the dull side of things.

If you actually like the piece and work much more on it, it could eventually move forward.

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