Fragile Gods - "Days Without End"

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KVRAF
5699 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Sat Jun 08, 2019 6:15 pm

Sometimes life feels like a dream that you can't wake up from. "Days Without End" tries to capture that dark, claustrophobic feeling. Aika Zabala provided additional vocals.

https://soundcloud.com/fragilegods/days-without-end

https://youtu.be/efB3T2IbiyA
The video is excerpted from the 1943 experimental film "Meshes of the Afternoon" by Maya Deren and Alexander Hammid.

Spotify link: https://open.spotify.com/track/72H4VwxB ... UvILsLYPlQ

Instruments: Icarus, Monark, Repro5, Rayblaster, Audjoo Helix, BFD3, slop sink

Lyrics are on Soundcloud. Any feedback is appreciated.
Last edited by Frantz on Fri Jul 19, 2019 2:43 pm, edited 4 times in total.

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KVRAF
20449 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Post Sat Jun 08, 2019 6:28 pm

My Feedback

Music - 9.5
Instruments - 9.5
Performance - 10
Mix - 10

Overall - 9.75

Comments: You really need to post more. Your stuff is so fresh. It's not the same old same old. Had you been doing this in the 80s I have no doubt you would have made it in the business.

KVRist
233 posts since 25 Nov, 2013

Post Sat Jun 08, 2019 6:53 pm

Great tune Frantz!

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KVRAF
1548 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Post Sun Jun 09, 2019 12:04 pm

Really good variety in the arrangement. I'm more of a major-chord focused kind of guy so I was looking for more maj.
That female vocal does add an extra dimension. Half of the tracks posted on kvr, to be honest I skip through because they are very predictable, but yours keeps me engaged all the way through because of the creative variety.

KVRian
884 posts since 3 Jan, 2016

Post Sun Jun 09, 2019 3:25 pm

Great song here Franz!

I especially liked the awkward juxtaposition of your tortured vocals and the sensual, siren like female vocals. I think the chorus really nailed this one. Good musical ideas and a solid mix.

It made me think of the B-52s, although quite different in style.


:tu:

KVRAF
6601 posts since 9 Mar, 2003 from the bridge of sighs

Post Sun Jun 09, 2019 4:49 pm

be difficult to pick apart this one ...
quite well done ...

particularly enjoyed the subtly offset vocal delay ...
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KVRian
799 posts since 3 Jul, 2006

Post Tue Jun 11, 2019 9:28 am

Enjoyed this quite a bit!
Very good production as usual.
Cheers!

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KVRAF

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5699 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Wed Jun 12, 2019 6:55 pm

wagtunes wrote: ↑
Sat Jun 08, 2019 6:28 pm
My Feedback

Music - 9.5
Instruments - 9.5
Performance - 10
Mix - 10

Overall - 9.75

Comments: You really need to post more. Your stuff is so fresh. It's not the same old same old. Had you been doing this in the 80s I have no doubt you would have made it in the business.
Thanks very much for your kind words. I worked on this on weekends at a leisurely pace, gradually polishing it. It was an enjoyable process even if my productivity is low these days.

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KVRAF
2086 posts since 17 Apr, 2004

Post Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:50 am

+1 on the two voices complementing each other well. Good song too!
Voted KVR's resident drunk Robert Smith impersonator (thanks Frantz!)

https://soundcloud.com/steevm/

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KVRian
1134 posts since 28 Oct, 2005 from Finland

Post Fri Jun 14, 2019 12:26 pm

Nice job. Good song with nightmare mood.

KVRAF
2316 posts since 2 Jun, 2016

Post Fri Jun 14, 2019 1:05 pm

Lovely arrangement and melodies with hints towards Bowie / John Foxx and the Maths.
Distinctive vocal tone and delivery.
Excellent stuff :phones:

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addled muppet weed
80658 posts since 26 Jan, 2003 from through the looking glass

Post Thu Jun 20, 2019 9:02 am

very 80s leaning 8)
cant help but imagine you having a supply of dry ice for the studio :hihi:

awesome mix, very clean, easy to hear each element, but all sits together well :tu:
like wags said, do more.

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KVRAF

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5699 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Thu Jun 20, 2019 6:37 pm

kloon wrote: ↑
Sat Jun 08, 2019 6:53 pm
Great tune Frantz!
Thanks for listening Kloon. :)

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KVRAF

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5699 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Sun Jun 23, 2019 6:02 am

Bansaw wrote: ↑
Sun Jun 09, 2019 12:04 pm
Really good variety in the arrangement. I'm more of a major-chord focused kind of guy so I was looking for more maj.
That female vocal does add an extra dimension. Half of the tracks posted on kvr, to be honest I skip through because they are very predictable, but yours keeps me engaged all the way through because of the creative variety.
Glad you enjoyed the variety. One of my goals was to try to keep it interesting throughout especially with the slow tempo.

I agree the female vocalist Aika helps a lot since she can actually sing. :)

Thanks for your comments.

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KVRian
653 posts since 18 Mar, 2019

Post Sun Jun 23, 2019 11:30 am

Good song and good vocals!
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