poplar [downtempo electronic]

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jadeandtea
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10 posts since 20 Jun, 2019

Post Sun Jun 30, 2019 11:08 am

Hey, I just put up a track I've been working on for a while and I'm looking for any constructive criticism. Please let me know what I can work on!

https://soundcloud.com/jadeandtea/poplar

mindstuff
KVRist
73 posts since 20 Mar, 2019

Re: poplar [downtempo electronic]

Post Sun Jun 30, 2019 1:46 pm

I'm no expert however I feel we should be helping each other here at least with ideas...so these are only my ideas and nothing you should listen to. My opinions are based on the music I like, listen to, and produce...so they may not be applicable to your genre.

IMO the song quality is great. For me though it was a bit repetitive. I wanted the newly added elements to grab me and fill me with more but they feel flat for me...for instance, at about 1:15 the synth with lots of reverb in the background. Then the guitar at the end was a nice touch but bring it forward more...and maybe add a short guitar riff in the intro for better balance

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wagtunes
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16141 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Re: poplar [downtempo electronic]

Post Sun Jun 30, 2019 1:56 pm

My Feedback

Music - 5
Instruments - 7
Performance - 5
Mix - 7

Overall - 6

Comments: By a minute in, you lost me. Track isn't developing fast enough, especially not for a 2 minute track. Needs a top line melody desperately. For me, this is just unfinished background noise. Mix is okay but nothing special. Instruments are also okay but nothing special. Abrupt ending didn't help. Very ordinary piece.

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thecontrolcentre
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24157 posts since 27 Jul, 2005 from the wilds of wanny

Re: poplar [downtempo electronic]

Post Sun Jun 30, 2019 2:04 pm

i really like this. It's refreshingly different and inventive for EDM ... no cliches or ridiculous breakdowns. Could do with a little "ear candy" early on. The guitar at the end is cool. The track reminded me of Lorde a little. The mix is pretty good and could be longer for me. Good work. I'm listening again :)

jadeandtea
KVRer
10 posts since 20 Jun, 2019

Re: poplar [downtempo electronic]

Post Tue Jul 02, 2019 8:53 am

mindstuff wrote:
Sun Jun 30, 2019 1:46 pm

IMO the song quality is great. For me though it was a bit repetitive. I wanted the newly added elements to grab me and fill me with more but they feel flat for me...for instance, at about 1:15 the synth with lots of reverb in the background. Then the guitar at the end was a nice touch but bring it forward more...and maybe add a short guitar riff in the intro for better balance
I get what you're saying. Thanks for the advice, much appreciated! Do you think I need more instruments? I wasn't sure what to add.
wagtunes wrote:
Sun Jun 30, 2019 1:56 pm

Comments: By a minute in, you lost me. Track isn't developing fast enough, especially not for a 2 minute track. Needs a top line melody desperately. For me, this is just unfinished background noise. Mix is okay but nothing special. Instruments are also okay but nothing special. Abrupt ending didn't help. Very ordinary piece.
I would probably make it longer in that case since I wanted it to be a slower song. Thanks for the comments, though!
thecontrolcentre wrote:
Sun Jun 30, 2019 2:04 pm
i really like this. It's refreshingly different and inventive for EDM ... no cliches or ridiculous breakdowns. Could do with a little "ear candy" early on. The guitar at the end is cool. The track reminded me of Lorde a little. The mix is pretty good and could be longer for me. Good work. I'm listening again :)
Thanks a lot! Yeah, I do hear the intro being monotonous.

recursive one
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3940 posts since 7 Feb, 2013

Re: poplar [downtempo electronic]

Post Tue Jul 02, 2019 9:30 am

Nice little piece, I like the sound-design here. Don't think it is really that repetitive, there seem to be enough sudden little changes to make it interesting. Good work.
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Morgaxx
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458 posts since 29 Feb, 2004 from Toronto

Re: poplar [downtempo electronic]

Post Wed Jul 03, 2019 12:28 pm

Enjoyed your sounds and groove. Not too repetitive, though it ends right where it could come together as a whole. There is a calmness nicely embedded in the thing. Could you get another min or 2 out of it?
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jadeandtea
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10 posts since 20 Jun, 2019

Re: poplar [downtempo electronic]

Post Fri Jul 05, 2019 12:40 am

recursive one wrote:
Tue Jul 02, 2019 9:30 am
Nice little piece, I like the sound-design here. Don't think it is really that repetitive, there seem to be enough sudden little changes to make it interesting. Good work.
Thanks!
Morgaxx wrote:
Wed Jul 03, 2019 12:28 pm
Enjoyed your sounds and groove. Not too repetitive, though it ends right where it could come together as a whole. There is a calmness nicely embedded in the thing. Could you get another min or 2 out of it?
I wasn’t sure how to proceed. Any ideas?

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vurt
addled muppet weed
46974 posts since 26 Jan, 2003 from through the looking glass

Re: poplar [downtempo electronic]

Post Sat Jul 06, 2019 2:45 pm

fun stuff, nice sounds and moves along nicely 8)
but yeah, the ending, it's a bit like you just gave up :hihi:

as said above, you could easy bring things back in there, either as a final upbeat all out dance epic! or bring in bit by bit again, but mixing the elements in different combinations?

hard to say, but theres definitely room for more :tu:

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Moe Shinola
KVRian
1489 posts since 11 Nov, 2004 from Kansas City, MO

Re: poplar [downtempo electronic]

Post Sun Jul 07, 2019 11:35 pm

It makes me think of a train ride. Nice relaxing music.
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