Sternennebel

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Musikarchitekt
KVRer
7 posts since 13 Feb, 2016 from Germany

Post Wed Jul 10, 2019 12:59 pm

This is a new track of mine. It should sound less old school than my last tracks. I'm not sure about the genre, should be a mix of pop, dance and house.

https://soundcloud.com/musikarchitekt/sternennebel

What do you think about sound design, mixing etc.?

Thanks in advance! :)

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wagtunes
KVRAF
16188 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Re: Sternennebel

Post Wed Jul 10, 2019 1:12 pm

My Feedback

Music - 7.5
Instruments - 8
Performance - 8
Mix - 7.5

Overall - 7.75

Comments: Intro could use some EQ and a volume increase. Very dull. The pumping is annoying. Musically, it seems all over the place. Doesn't really settle into one idea. The parts don't seem to really go together. They feel disjointed. Rhythmically, it's fine. Outside of a few minor annoyances, the mix is okay. I've heard worse. I just have a hard time following the piece because it's, as I said, all over the place. Some structure would help.

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excuse me please
KVRist
141 posts since 10 Oct, 2018

Re: Sternennebel

Post Wed Jul 10, 2019 1:40 pm

Lol, you really got the wrong lead for your song 😊
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=_UmOY6ek_Y4

Skyfall72
KVRist
38 posts since 14 Apr, 2019

Re: Sternennebel

Post Wed Jul 10, 2019 2:28 pm

I think the song is definitely unique and it has a quirk of its own which is a good thing and that's what sets you apart from the rest. Don't be afraid making it weird you never know ppl might like it. I love the sound design and believe me I know how hard it is to create one.
The whole mix sounds balance and neutral I think you could mix it a lil bit more aggressive to give an edge. However, the chord progression at the end doesn't make sense but the rest is cool. Congrats Bud.

fastlanephil
KVRian
785 posts since 3 Jan, 2016

Re: Sternennebel

Post Wed Jul 10, 2019 2:38 pm

Well, it sounds like you’re trying to take a pretty done before sounding dance song and adding off the wall chord changes, sounds and change ups here and there to create something new. Maybe that would work but your execution leaves something to be desired.

JCJR
KVRAF
2668 posts since 17 Apr, 2005 from S.E. TN

Re: Sternennebel

Post Wed Jul 10, 2019 3:38 pm

Holds together well. I like the relative sparsness of the arrangement, and the bass sound. The other patches fit appropriate.

I like the galloping rhythmic feel.

The chord progression at the end doesn't sound weird to me. Just fairly logical modulations on the theme. In fact, something similarly constructed as a bridge might make sense inserted once or twice in the body of the song-- Where multiple repeated simple melody and chords risk listener attention drift. Change it up a little in the middle.

If such modulated bridge were added it would be extra good if the middle bridge chord/melody modulations are written different than the ending chord modulations, to avoid an impression of "flying in" an exact same part to multiple locations, autopilot copy/paste arrangement techniques.

That is just a throwaway idea not long considered maybe dumb.

Comes down to the song purpose, who you want to please. If you are the main one needs pleasing then ignore all suggestions and do it exactly what sounds best to you

Folks who think the chords get too weird at the end-- If you want to please that audience (which might easily be a majority of listeners) then you definitely wouldn't add EVEN MORE "weird chords" in the middle and might even consider simplifying the ending section.

It's hard to say. :)

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Musikarchitekt
KVRer
7 posts since 13 Feb, 2016 from Germany

Re: Sternennebel

Post Thu Jul 11, 2019 4:20 am

Thank you all for your extensive feedback so far! :)

Morgaxx
KVRist
458 posts since 29 Feb, 2004 from Toronto

Re: Sternennebel

Post Sat Jul 13, 2019 9:37 am

Nice track. I agree with what JCJR wrote. I disagree with some others. A brighter more sparkly mix would help imo.
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