Fall Hymn - Orchestral

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226 posts since 14 Feb, 2013

Post Mon Aug 19, 2019 10:58 pm


What can be improved on this, and how?
Is there too much "going on" (harmony) or is it fine as it is?

I've listened to earlier critics and made use of slight dissonances in my harmonic progressions.
I've also attempted some counterpoint. Please let me know if it works.

863 posts since 3 Jan, 2016

Post Fri Aug 23, 2019 8:07 pm

You begin it with a solo string playing a melody and then the flute comes in and repeats those four notes which is fine. Maybe then allow the solo string to continue to solo and then just bring in the flute for harmony on the last three notes of the intro or something closer to this. This would be a simpler arrangement but maybe it work better for setting up the next section with the full strings.

At :55 the cellos? continue to play without the higher strings and then there seems to be no real break as they begin the next section. For me, I think it would work better to let all the strings finish that section together with at least a slight pause before beginning the next section.

That’s my two cents.

Nice music!

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3221 posts since 5 Mar, 2004 from Gold Coast Australia

Post Fri Aug 23, 2019 11:08 pm

Overall I think that you have something lovely, with some reservations:

If I were there, I'd say it feel "rushed", like you need to play in a way that emphasizes the ebb & flow of your melody instead of playing straight through it. I really want that note on the top of the phrase to be held - like the pivot of a see-saw - before it runs down to the conclusion.

Sounds are lovely but I'm finding the boom at the bottom distracting. Were you doing that deliberately? If so, this ain't EDM.

At about 00:58 you feel lost like you aren't sure what to do as you move sections. A pause might do better.

It makes a really nice start to a larger cycle of a concerto

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468 posts since 16 Dec, 2003

Post Sat Aug 24, 2019 7:34 am

I love lilting, soft classical music like this. I use the word "pastoral" but I'm not sure that's the correct term. I liked it, plain and simple.

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1193 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Post Sat Aug 24, 2019 11:08 am

Great. I like it, its beautiful.
My 2 cents: at 0:28 the jump in volume is too great.
I would like to hear the lower octaves filled out more to give it more weight in parts.
As far as instrumentation goes: I'm getting a lot of strings, but not much brass or wind.

226 posts since 14 Feb, 2013

Post Mon Aug 26, 2019 3:45 am

Thanks a lot for your comments. I will see what I can do to improve on this.

152 posts since 7 Dec, 2017

Post Tue Aug 27, 2019 5:33 am

I don't know anything about classical music but I find this very relaxing and soothing. Nice work

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