Fragile Gods - "This Blue World"

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KVRAF
5699 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Sun Oct 27, 2019 6:48 pm

I wrote this summery pop song and I finally finished tweaking it, just in time for Halloween. :help:

Introducing Katie J on lead vocals. Aika Zabala sang harmonies on the chorus.

https://youtu.be/gytIMnG_BlY
https://soundcloud.com/fragilegods/this-blue-world

Instruments: Icarus, Monark, Audjoo Helix, Rayblaster, BFD3, Sonic Couture Electro-Acoustic

Lyrics are on Soundcloud. Any feedback is appreciated.


Edits
Nov 3: Adjusted the vocal level of verse 1 to better match verse 2's vocal level.
Nov 9: Lowered the drum machine levels to be closer to the acoustic drum levels.
Nov 10: Added video.
Last edited by Frantz on Sat Nov 30, 2019 7:03 pm, edited 4 times in total.

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KVRAF
20449 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Post Sun Oct 27, 2019 7:18 pm

Always look forward to your tracks. Like DT, you don't post nearly enough. As usual, top notch stuff here. Katie has a really cool voice. Absolutely nothing to criticize here. I know I said it before but in another era you could have had a monster career. I will probably listen to this track more than once. One thing I have to comment on. LOVE that bass. Which synth did the bass part?

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KVRAF

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5699 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Sun Oct 27, 2019 7:40 pm

wagtunes wrote:
Sun Oct 27, 2019 7:18 pm
Always look forward to your tracks. Like DT, you don't post nearly enough. As usual, top notch stuff here. Katie has a really cool voice. Absolutely nothing to criticize here. I know I said it before but in another era you could have had a monster career. I will probably listen to this track more than once. One thing I have to comment on. LOVE that bass. Which synth did the bass part?
Thanks for your kind words!

I used Monark for most of the bass but occasionally I switched to Icarus for a brighter sound. I used ShaperBox2 on both bass synths to provide some small variations in the sound.

KVRAF
2092 posts since 22 Jan, 2011 from near Los Angeles

Post Tue Oct 29, 2019 9:17 pm

Frantz,
Thank you for the review! Now your song: sounds rather 80's, which is fine by me. Katie reminds me of Terri Nunn (Berlin), which is a big compliment from me. Aika sounds very good also. Keep working with these singers if you can, they sound great together. The entire song sounds really good, nice melodies! I think it is radio worthy. Overall, perhaps your most pleasing song for me. :)
You can hear my original music at this link: https://www.soundclick.com/artist/defau ... dID=224436

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KVRian
697 posts since 3 Jul, 2017

Post Fri Nov 01, 2019 12:54 am

This song is very 'American', indeed. It's just that special vibe and songwriting/singing that reminded me of American pop music. Although the instrumentation is quite different to current 'billboard music', and, of course - your typical 80's sounds used here make the track work in another direction than pop. Nice work!

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Boss Lovin' DR
8204 posts since 15 Mar, 2002 from the grimness of yorkshire

Post Fri Nov 01, 2019 3:22 pm

Excellent, and a bit different too. When I was listening to it (with my arrangement head on... :scared: ) I was thinking, hmmm, would be nice to have a bit with just vocals on their own...and lo and behold... :love:

Nice work.

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KVRAF

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5699 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Sat Nov 02, 2019 10:25 am

aaron aardvark wrote:
Tue Oct 29, 2019 9:17 pm
Now your song: sounds rather 80's, which is fine by me. Katie reminds me of Terri Nunn (Berlin), which is a big compliment from me. Aika sounds very good also. Keep working with these singers if you can, they sound great together. The entire song sounds really good, nice melodies! I think it is radio worthy. Overall, perhaps your most pleasing song for me. :)
I am glad you liked the vocalists and the song. I wanted to do something that had a chance of getting on more Spotify playlists. The playlist curators don't seem to appreciate my growling. :help:

Thanks for your comments. :)

KVRAF
6603 posts since 9 Mar, 2003 from the bridge of sighs

Post Sat Nov 02, 2019 12:28 pm

very well done ...
clinically crisp and pared of extraneous bits ...
everything fits cleanly , and flows ...
loved the outro ...
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KVRAF
2088 posts since 17 Apr, 2004

Post Sat Nov 02, 2019 4:55 pm

Great production, catchy chorus. It's very good!

I have 2 minor criticisms:

Not a fan of the glitchy fills in the intro and towards the end. To me, they break up the build up, with the underlying beat being so straight. Seems at odds with the song. Also seem loud.

I miss your voice. Surely it'd work with you joining in the first four lines of the chorus, and spotify be damned? I like the vocals you have of course.
Voted KVR's resident drunk Robert Smith impersonator (thanks Frantz!)

https://soundcloud.com/steevm/

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KVRAF

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5699 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Sun Nov 03, 2019 11:07 am

htcnext2 wrote:
Fri Nov 01, 2019 12:54 am
This song is very 'American', indeed. It's just that special vibe and songwriting/singing that reminded me of American pop music. Although the instrumentation is quite different to current 'billboard music', and, of course - your typical 80's sounds used here make the track work in another direction than pop. Nice work!
I was going for straightforward pop this time. I guess since the lead vocalist and I are both American, it is not surprising that it sounds American although it is not something I thought about when making it.

I actually tried listening to the current Billboard charts to see if I could use more contemporary sounds but pretty much hated it so I ended up doing my version of what I thought pop should sound like.

Thanks for your comments. :)

KVRAF
1530 posts since 19 Mar, 2008 from germany

Post Sun Nov 03, 2019 11:30 am

Wooaaa! I enjoyed this catchy and dulcet song. It is beautifully straight
with the very commemorating chorus line "this world is here for you and me",
it is a "real" hitpopsong! The ending is somewhat particular. :tu:

What I would change: Kick and snare are a bit up front, so I would
reduce their volume or their transients by 1 - 1.5 dB. But that is just
my taste. :wink:
free mp3s + info: andy-enroe.de songs + weird stuff: enroe.de

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KVRAF
30184 posts since 27 Jul, 2005 from the wilds of wanny

Post Sun Nov 03, 2019 11:41 am

Very catchy. Nice hooky chorus. Great mix and excellent vocals ... Good job Frantz.

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KVRAF
16257 posts since 24 May, 2009 from A galaxy, far far away

Post Sun Nov 03, 2019 11:58 am

Can't fault the production, arrangement, or the performances; and there are parts that I do really like. Unfortunately, the cheesiness of the verses (Chords, melody and lyrics) grates just a little too much, for me.

That's not to say it's bad. I can imagine exactly what you were going for, and think you achieved it. It's just me. Maybe I'd change my opinion over repeated hearings.

Great job, though :tu:

KVRian
884 posts since 3 Jan, 2016

Post Sun Nov 03, 2019 3:35 pm

A well done pop song. The lead singer reminds me a little of Stevie Nicks from Fleetwood Mac. It definitely feels mostly like 80s post punk to me at least.

I wonder if this song could cross over to the Country genre with a different arrangement.

KVRAF
2293 posts since 1 Sep, 2016

Post Mon Nov 04, 2019 4:15 am

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