"When I Saw Her" ...<<synthpop / retro>>... (based on a true story)

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Bansaw
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1156 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Post Sat Jun 20, 2020 6:17 am

Based on a true story of mine when I was younger.
Feedback welcome on arrangement, mixing, appreciated.
https://soundcloud.com/bansaw-843690132/when-i-saw-her
Lyrics
All night, you have crossed the line,
into my dreams
All day, you've been on my mind,
so it seems...

Ooo ohohoo.....

When I saw her get onto that train
When I saw her get onto that train
I did nothing, Oh,
I did nothing,
nothing at all

Some day, I had saw your face
in the news
One day, you will make it big,
as someone's muse

Ooo ohohoo.....

When I saw her get onto that train
When I saw her get onto that train
I did nothing, Oh,
I did nothing,
nothing at all

Seize the day
Seize the day
Seize the day
My friend

When I saw her get onto that train
When I saw her get onto that train
I did nothing, Oh,
I did nothing,
nothing at all
Last edited by Bansaw on Wed Jun 24, 2020 1:07 pm, edited 3 times in total.

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Erisian
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1601 posts since 21 Mar, 2020

Re: When I Saw Her ...[synthpop]... based on a true story. feedback welcome...

Post Sat Jun 20, 2020 6:49 am

YAY - back to the eighties. :tu:
Bansaw wrote:
Sat Jun 20, 2020 6:17 am
When I saw her get onto that train
When I saw her get onto that train
I did nothing, Oh,
I did nothing,
nothing at all
Used to be the story of my life. :( But no longer. :wheee:
I really enjoyed listening to this - thank you. :)

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wagtunes
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19389 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Re: When I Saw Her ...[synthpop]... based on a true story. feedback welcome...

Post Sat Jun 20, 2020 9:34 am

Okay, a few things.

1. It's about time you came out with something. Sheesh, it takes forever to get tune out of you. :lol:

2. I think you should go to Youtube and create a phony band name and post all your songs under it. Then, go to Wiki and create a Wiki page and make up a history. Make it believable. Like the group got significant airplay in like Bulgaria or something like that. Have some chart numbers for singles that aren't too high, like Billboard top 100 singles peak at number 97. You know, stuff that would be difficult to fact check. Then start promoting the videos. Guarantee you'll get people talking about them asking it anybody else heard of them.

3. Okay, you told me last time that you do a lot to get your vocals to sound like DM. What exactly did you do for this song? Steps. Plugins used, any special tricks you used, etc. I want to see if I can duplicate your sound, though I think my voice is just too different to matter. But I'd like to give it a shot.

4. Great stuff as always. I can absolutely hear this played on top 40 stations back in the 80s.

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layzer
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6809 posts since 11 Jun, 2006

Re: When I Saw Her ...[synthpop]... based on a true story. feedback welcome...

Post Sat Jun 20, 2020 2:25 pm

hehe reminds me of 16 candles where Samantha approaches Jake at the school dance
and does nothing, then runs away.
also reminds me of all my "it should have, could have, would have happened" songs.
great production, Sir!
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Bansaw
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1156 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Re: When I Saw Her ...[synthpop]... based on a true story. feedback welcome...

Post Sat Jun 20, 2020 3:17 pm

@Erisian - thanks for the feedback. Pleased this is no longer your story. :tu:
@Wags - : ) It does take a while to get a tune out of me. I'm back working full time now after lockdown, and I find my self spending a longer time fiddling with a song to get the best I can out of it. Thats why it takes me so long. Plus, coming up with a theme and lyrics has been a bottleneck for me. I might have to do little video for you re: the vocals because there's a few factors involved.
@layzer - This is a big could have/should have for me. It was at Butlins holiday camp in Skegness, North East England, when I was mid-teens. She was absolutely lovely and we spent a few times smiling at each other, but I was just to shy. Later I had read the newspaper and she was doing some modeling or something I think. That could have been a golden moment. Alas,... but thankfully, it was not the last of those moments.


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wagtunes
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19389 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Re: When I Saw Her ...[synthpop]... based on a true story. feedback welcome...

Post Mon Jun 22, 2020 3:42 pm

Bansaw wrote:
Mon Jun 22, 2020 2:58 pm
@wagtunes, I did a little video on my vocal production.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3MFi6iWja58
That is so cool. You actually do quite a bit to them. No wonder they sound so good.

Thanks so much for this. Have to check out Nectar. I have CLA and use that pretty much all the time. Nectar adds something really nice to it that I like.

Will be uploading my latest in a few minutes. Little prog rock tune. Vocals are very simple and bare on that one.

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Bansaw
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1156 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Re: When I Saw Her ...[synthpop]... based on a true story. feedback welcome...

Post Tue Jun 23, 2020 2:44 pm

wagtunes wrote:
Mon Jun 22, 2020 3:42 pm
Thanks so much for this. Have to check out Nectar. I have CLA and use that pretty much all the time. Nectar adds something really nice to it that I like.
Nectar was a game changer for me. The bundle I got it with also contained Melodyne Essentails and Vocalsynth etc. With Nectar there are a lot of presets to get you started on a sound you like.
Every so often Izotope will come out with a good sale deal.

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thomekk
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2601 posts since 3 May, 2003 from Germany

Re: "When I Saw Her" ...<<synthpop / retro>>... (based on a true story)

Post Wed Jun 24, 2020 2:27 pm

Bansaw,

really great track :tu: cudos for that. Production is also high-leveled and I appreciated the lyrics - all fitting well together :wink:

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hotmitts
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424 posts since 27 Nov, 2003 from UK, Polegate

Re: "When I Saw Her" ...<<synthpop / retro>>... (based on a true story)

Post Thu Jun 25, 2020 10:53 am

Great ! Makes me want to dig out some Blancmange LP's. Nice tune, nice arrangement and production

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Bansaw
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1156 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Re: "When I Saw Her" ...<<synthpop / retro>>... (based on a true story)

Post Sat Jun 27, 2020 7:58 am

@thomekk - thank you, appreciate the comment and encouragement.
@hotmitts - thanks also. Blancmange, I remember them. You still have vinyl? Nice.

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markkuja
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905 posts since 28 Oct, 2005 from Finland

Re: "When I Saw Her" ...<<synthpop / retro>>... (based on a true story)

Post Sun Jun 28, 2020 12:12 am

Nice synth pop. Pleasant ambiance and sounds

MRT
KVRian
1169 posts since 3 Dec, 2002

Re: "When I Saw Her" ...<<synthpop / retro>>... (based on a true story)

Post Sun Jun 28, 2020 4:10 am

Another impressive track. Thanks for posting the video, hopefully it will help me polish my vocals a bit.
I have to echo wagtunes here, you've pretty much nailed your sound, I think your ready for a little more self promotion. Regardless, best of luck with whatever you choose to do.

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Frantz
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5348 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Re: "When I Saw Her" ...<<synthpop / retro>>... (based on a true story)

Post Sun Jun 28, 2020 10:47 am

Another engaging synthpop tune. The production is fully realized in an enjoyable 80s style. :tu:

Regarding the vocals, there is some artificial vibrato on the word "I" that sounds weird. Occasionally it feels like there is too much Melodyne manipulation of the vocal melody that goes beyond normal pitch correction.

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Bansaw
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1156 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Re: "When I Saw Her" ...<<synthpop / retro>>... (based on a true story)

Post Mon Jun 29, 2020 6:45 am

@markkuja - thanks for the comment and feedback :tu:

@MRT - appreciate what you wrote. I was thinking of self-promotion and 'getting my music out there', but I really wonder if my music is commercial enough, or would attract a wide audience? I have been looking at perhaps remixing my stuff into a more modern genre like House. (There is one track I did on Soundcloud that is funky house.) We'll see. There is a Retrowave Radio site I submitted to with no response, but their stuff is more Synthwave than Synthpop. Not many Synthpop outlets out there I think. Anyway, thanks.

@Frantz - always appreciate your comments. I'll look at that "I" vibrato. That may be Nectar doing some pitch correction. Hope to hear one of your songs soon, its been a while.

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