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Jeffguitars
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58 posts since 22 Jul, 2019

Post Thu Aug 06, 2020 1:28 pm

I realize that doing these at home will always be demos. When I get in to mixing my own songs I can obsess and then I realize that is ridiculous because all these will ever be is demos, Iwould love to be able to record at a real studio but just isn't in the cards.

Anyway, any tips would be cool, I can still edit the tracks so if you have a good monitoring space by all means let me know what I should alter or fix.
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5612 posts since 9 Jul, 2002 from Helsinki

Post Thu Aug 06, 2020 1:43 pm

Just let go, the mix is brilliant!

Actually the whole execution is just brilliant, super happy I got to hear this :o

edit: it does have a lot of mid highs

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jancivil
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20459 posts since 20 Oct, 2007 from not here

Post Thu Aug 06, 2020 1:49 pm

I think the execution is fine. Drums are kind of stiff, but the vocals just work.

There are people making records from their bedsit, btw

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Bansaw
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1275 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Post Thu Aug 06, 2020 2:57 pm

Imo, vocals need to cut through a touch more. Either guitars should be slightly quieter, or vocals should be hotter.
But, really liked the voice, arrangement, guitar solo.

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biodiode
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660 posts since 23 Sep, 2003 from UK

Post Fri Aug 07, 2020 8:37 am

Cool track and thank you for sharing. The arrangement holds well and the tone of the vocals sound great. I am, however, with Bansaw on that they could do with cutting through a little more.
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layzer
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7203 posts since 11 Jun, 2006

Post Sat Aug 08, 2020 3:03 am

reminds me of old joe walsh. i enjoyed it and think you are
too hard on yourself. this is solid classic rock. good job.
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silenthill2006
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544 posts since 16 Nov, 2006

Post Sat Aug 08, 2020 5:07 am

I really like the vocals and arrangement. Solo was nice as well. However, I would like to see more variation on the drums. As Jancivil mentioned, It feels a bit stiff there.
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Halonmusic
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4376 posts since 13 Nov, 2015 from Norway

Post Sat Aug 08, 2020 6:00 am

Are these your vocals? Very well done! Looking forward to your next one :tu:
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seismic1
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9749 posts since 13 Mar, 2009 from UK

Post Sun Aug 09, 2020 2:33 pm

Layzer mentioned Joe Walsh. I was having similar thoughts. Especially those little guitar licks in the verses. You could ask Bill Szymczyk around to help out, but this sounds great as it is.

Good work :)

starise
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51 posts since 31 Aug, 2007

Post Mon Aug 10, 2020 7:52 am

Has a raw vibe which I guess I would expect from a track made in this way.I actually like the raw vibe....my only suggestion would be to ramp it up a few notches in tempo, add some swing to it a catchy bass line and people won't stop thinking about it IMHO.

Jeffguitars
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58 posts since 22 Jul, 2019

Post Mon Aug 10, 2020 6:53 pm

Yes to the question about the vocals being me. All of it is me. Yeah, the drums sound terribly stiff, I should have used more variations for sure.
Also I just did a new song today and changed from micing my bass amp to do bass. Guitars are all miced through my bass amp and I was using an overdrive pedal in front of it. Thanks for all the tis. My brother also said the vocals need to cut through more and be louder. Looks like a lot feel that way.

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TraiT
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126 posts since 20 Nov, 2007 from NY

Post Wed Aug 12, 2020 2:36 pm

It sounds good. Maaaybe there's a lot of mid/highs .jon said. Like maybe some more bass would make it sound a bit warmer. Take this all with a grain of salt. Though if you want to bring the vocals forward, one way to do that without sacraficing the rest of the sound and without changing levels, could be to sidechain the vocals to the a mixdown track with the guitar and use a compressor. I am kind of obsessing with sidechain compressors lately >_>.

Did you play the drums yourself on a kit or is that written in with MIDI?
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enroe
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1288 posts since 19 Mar, 2008 from germany

Post Thu Aug 13, 2020 11:36 am

Good song idea! As said before, the vocals should stand out a little more,
also the bass could push a little more. You think it's still a demo? Mmmh, ...
maybe a small temporal distance and a little bit of changes in the mix
are enough.

I think: Don't be too overcritical - just be creative! :tu:
This song has a wonderful flow - and sounds already rather good! :wink:
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