Eighties electronic song about the environment

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SparkySpark
KVRAF
1905 posts since 30 Aug, 2004 from Lancaster, UK

Post Fri Sep 04, 2020 9:52 am

Hi,

This is a song I "released" for the August Music Café competition (now closed).

Due to (etc, etc), I am away from the studio. Hence, I'd be grateful for some feedback on EQ settings. For me, it's more about sequencing and composition than production, but anyway... :wink:

Hope you enjoy this very eighties electronic song, and have a great weekend!

https://soundcloud.com/terenius/outpost

=== LYRICS ===
Sunny day
The sky is blue
It’s beautiful
And so are you

The ocean cruise
So fantastic
While the seas fill up
With microplastics

Back in the city
The sky is grey
From hundred million barrels
Of oil a day

So put your gas mask on
And carry on
There’s no risk getting stung
When all the bees are gone

Chorus
On this outpost in space that we call our home
Hear the message, the outcry, the plea
From the highest of mountains to the roots of the trees
From the seagulls to the depth of the sea
Come rescue me

And so we spend our cash
But what is it worth
When we have too much money
Too little earth

Divided we rose
Together we fall
‘Cause the world was so big
But the planet’s so small

Back from the city
With a brand new phone
Well who can we blame
When the fault is our own

And when the alien ships
Come down from the sky
They will see the signs
And they will hear the cry

Chorus
Person 1: Say a number between 1 and 10.
Computer scientist: There is no number between 1 and 10.
Go MuLab!

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layzer
KVRAF
7195 posts since 11 Jun, 2006

Post Fri Sep 04, 2020 10:23 am

wow, EXCELLENT!
well crafted retro synthpop.
an all around impressive production.
no wonder why you are more concerned
about composition, you got no worries
about production because it sounds great.
nothing to critique, only a big :tu:
HW SYNTHS [KORG T2EX - AKAI AX80 - YAMAHA SY77 - ENSONIQ VFX]
HW MODULES [OBi M1000 - ROLAND MKS-50 - ROLAND JV880 - KURZ 1000PX]
SW [CHARLATAN - OBXD - OXE - ELEKTRO - MICROTERA - M1 - SURGE - RMiV]
DAW [ENERGY XT2/1U RACK WINXP / MAUDIO 1010LT PCI]

SparkySpark
KVRAF
1905 posts since 30 Aug, 2004 from Lancaster, UK

Post Fri Sep 04, 2020 2:00 pm

layzer wrote:
Fri Sep 04, 2020 10:23 am
wow, EXCELLENT!
well crafted retro synthpop.
an all around impressive production.
no wonder why you are more concerned
about composition, you got no worries
about production because it sounds great.
nothing to critique, only a big :tu:
Oh my, that means so much to me! :hug:

In truth, I wasn't expecting such a reply at all!

Sincere THANK YOU! :phones:
Person 1: Say a number between 1 and 10.
Computer scientist: There is no number between 1 and 10.
Go MuLab!

SparkySpark
KVRAF
1905 posts since 30 Aug, 2004 from Lancaster, UK

Post Fri Sep 04, 2020 2:20 pm

By the way, you might also enjoy a track I uploaded earlier this year; a sort of happy song about breakups. :wink:

Once again, a very busy mix. Now when I listen to it again, I find the reverb on the lead vocals really superb. Had to check what it was. Not surprisingly: Eventide SP2016. :love:

Enjoy!

https://soundcloud.com/terenius/lovingovertime
Person 1: Say a number between 1 and 10.
Computer scientist: There is no number between 1 and 10.
Go MuLab!

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layzer
KVRAF
7195 posts since 11 Jun, 2006

Post Fri Sep 04, 2020 3:02 pm

i traced back to your soundcloud and i am now listening to it
as you posted it here.. lol
its as good as your first one, you have a talent
for good melodies, lyrics and arranging.
some other vocalists may chime in pointing
out problems with pitch or processing,
but they sound good to me.
very new order-ish :tu:
keep making more. i'll listen :phones:
HW SYNTHS [KORG T2EX - AKAI AX80 - YAMAHA SY77 - ENSONIQ VFX]
HW MODULES [OBi M1000 - ROLAND MKS-50 - ROLAND JV880 - KURZ 1000PX]
SW [CHARLATAN - OBXD - OXE - ELEKTRO - MICROTERA - M1 - SURGE - RMiV]
DAW [ENERGY XT2/1U RACK WINXP / MAUDIO 1010LT PCI]

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Frantz
KVRAF
5436 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Fri Sep 04, 2020 4:37 pm

Great, well crafted song! Very 80s just as advertised. ;)

The mix is excellent. The bass is very solid. Perhaps the higher frequencies are slightly lacking but not in a serious way.

I felt it could use more variety. I would have liked a change of pace via a bridge/middle eight section.

The vocals are adequate but not as professional as the synth work. This is a challenge we one-man bands face.

Great job overall! :tu:

SparkySpark
KVRAF
1905 posts since 30 Aug, 2004 from Lancaster, UK

Post Fri Sep 04, 2020 11:13 pm

Frantz wrote:
Fri Sep 04, 2020 4:37 pm
Great, well crafted song! Very 80s just as advertised. ;)

The mix is excellent. The bass is very solid. Perhaps the higher frequencies are slightly lacking but not in a serious way.

I felt it could use more variety. I would have liked a change of pace via a bridge/middle eight section.

The vocals are adequate but not as professional as the synth work. This is a challenge we one-man bands face.

Great job overall! :tu:
Thanks for the feedback! As it happens, a middle eight section was actually there in my first version, but it became sooooo long (middle eighty rather) so I cut it out for snappiness. Great that the mix is good. I ended up mixing it on the Soundelux HD 681, a new experience for me.

I agree with you on the vocals. Well, it's not really about them for me anyway, and I'd love working with a great singer plus a good producer one day.

It's been a truly pleasurable experience listening to your tracks too by the way, so thanks! :tu:
Person 1: Say a number between 1 and 10.
Computer scientist: There is no number between 1 and 10.
Go MuLab!

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Bansaw
KVRian
1275 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Post Sat Sep 05, 2020 8:46 am

Nice retro track. Nice warm sounds, an enjoyable listen.
Vocals could do with some treatment - thickened up, wider, more energy sung into them, tuned etc.
Arrangement was pretty good.
Overall, very nice. Well done. :tu:

mimpulsez
KVRist
118 posts since 10 Feb, 2005 from Germany

Post Sun Sep 06, 2020 3:14 am

Superb*
Propellerhead Reason 11 and FL Studio

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCsW3Wr ... gA05XklBng

noylis
KVRist
100 posts since 26 Nov, 2009

Post Mon Sep 07, 2020 4:17 am

I like the track in general but i think you should redo the vocals i think you can do better i hear your voice and it has potential

SparkySpark
KVRAF
1905 posts since 30 Aug, 2004 from Lancaster, UK

Post Mon Sep 07, 2020 2:50 pm

noylis wrote:
Mon Sep 07, 2020 4:17 am
I like the track in general but i think you should redo the vocals i think you can do better i hear your voice and it has potential
Thanks, very kind! Yes, I'd love to record vocals with a proper audio engineer someday! :tu:
Person 1: Say a number between 1 and 10.
Computer scientist: There is no number between 1 and 10.
Go MuLab!

SparkySpark
KVRAF
1905 posts since 30 Aug, 2004 from Lancaster, UK

Post Mon Sep 07, 2020 2:52 pm

Bansaw wrote:
Sat Sep 05, 2020 8:46 am
Nice retro track. Nice warm sounds, an enjoyable listen.
Vocals could do with some treatment - thickened up, wider, more energy sung into them, tuned etc.
Arrangement was pretty good.
Overall, very nice. Well done. :tu:
Thanks so much for your comments. Yeah, I agree vocals are not so polished, so I'm happy you like other aspects of the song more. :wink:

Thanks again! :phones:
Person 1: Say a number between 1 and 10.
Computer scientist: There is no number between 1 and 10.
Go MuLab!

SparkySpark
KVRAF
1905 posts since 30 Aug, 2004 from Lancaster, UK

Post Mon Sep 07, 2020 2:53 pm

mimpulsez wrote:
Sun Sep 06, 2020 3:14 am
Superb*
Wow, thanks! :love:
Person 1: Say a number between 1 and 10.
Computer scientist: There is no number between 1 and 10.
Go MuLab!

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htcnext2
KVRist
480 posts since 3 Jul, 2017

Post Wed Sep 09, 2020 2:57 am

Absolutely great.

SparkySpark
KVRAF
1905 posts since 30 Aug, 2004 from Lancaster, UK

Post Thu Sep 10, 2020 4:51 am

htcnext2 wrote:
Wed Sep 09, 2020 2:57 am
Absolutely great.
Oh :oops: - thanks a lot! :tu:
Person 1: Say a number between 1 and 10.
Computer scientist: There is no number between 1 and 10.
Go MuLab!

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