Lockdown Girl - Electro Pop

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abi
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790 posts since 11 May, 2004 from cologne,germany

Post Mon Nov 23, 2020 3:52 am

https://soundcloud.com/abiuslu/lockdown-girl

hi there!

as always, feedback is very welcome, hope you have fun listening!

greetings from cologne

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htcnext2
KVRian
558 posts since 3 Jul, 2017

Post Mon Nov 23, 2020 4:11 am

nice! Vocoder is cool.

GMusic
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786 posts since 26 May, 2009 from Area 51

Post Mon Nov 23, 2020 5:26 am

I like it. Vocoder is cool, would be nice if it was slightly more clear (louder?) and with some more low end to make it found more filling.

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ChameleonMusic
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628 posts since 23 Nov, 2018 from Birmingham, UK

Post Mon Nov 23, 2020 5:41 am

Some good melodic hooks in there - catchy!

Overall - enjoyed it.

Good combo of synth sounds - works well....mix was good, but very slightly 'muddy' for me + I'd have liked a bit more textural variety...especially a few 'thinner' moments.

Vocoder is very appropriate, but I agree with GMusic - it's a little bit thin and too far back in the mix...a few artefacts in there as well every now and then..they're a sod to control sometimes!

The only serious issue for me was the occasional mismatch (for my ears) between chords, bass and melody in the main section...I don't believe in 'wrong' notes as such, but just felt that there could've been more appropriate choices for this style of music.
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Frantz
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5576 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Mon Nov 23, 2020 8:18 pm

Is the lyrical resemblance to Billy Joel's song coincidental? "Uptown girl. She's been living in her uptown world."

Nice melody. It has a melancholic quality that I like. Intriguing idea for a song. :tu:

The mix is mid-heavy and doesn't give a lot of space for the instruments to breathe.

abi
KVRian
790 posts since 11 May, 2004 from cologne,germany

Post Tue Nov 24, 2020 2:32 am

Thanks for the comments guys!

I agree to the comments that the vocoder could be clearer and more focused - will have a look at that! I only have an SM57 for vocal recording at the moment, so it´s not easy to get a clean signal somehow....

The lyrical resamblence is no coincence, I just had the song in my ear and went on from there. Not very original I guess, and I hope people don´t get offended.

Concerning the mix: yeah you´re right, there´s not much space in there, I´ll rework that as soon as I find the time and upload it again.

thanks!

abi
KVRian
790 posts since 11 May, 2004 from cologne,germany

Post Wed Nov 25, 2020 2:24 am

Ok, I did some tweaks to the mix mainly by adding diynamic eq´s to the vocal and synth parts.

Let me know what you think! :party:

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Frantz
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5576 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Thu Nov 26, 2020 12:13 pm

The mix sounds better now. Good job. :tu:

abi
KVRian
790 posts since 11 May, 2004 from cologne,germany

Post Fri Nov 27, 2020 9:19 pm

Frantz wrote:
Thu Nov 26, 2020 12:13 pm
The mix sounds better now. Good job. :tu:

Thank you!

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Bansaw
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1422 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

Post Mon Nov 30, 2020 6:06 pm

It enjoyable.
In terms of mixing, drums especially the snare sound a little too hot and sharp for me.

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