Intro & Verse Vocals, Opinions?

[dreamache]

I've never tried doing vocals before, I've always just been a guitar, drums, bass, song writer kinda guy, but I decided to give the whole vocal thing a shot.

http://www.garysimon.net/mymusic/introverse.mp3

PS: Don't mind the brief guitar feedback/static that occurs after the intro, this is just a rough draft.

Thanks

[dreamache]

late night bump...

[multree]

I think your voice works well with this kind of music... although you could push it a bit in the second part to raise the tension... but for a first try it's really goodd

cheers,
mully