the big - merry go round in the sea (Slow indie rock )
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- KVRer
- Topic Starter
- 20 posts since 2 Nov, 2014
https://soundcloud.com/user-867576262/m ... in-the-sea
i used kontakt - abbey road drums, damage,strings
air music technology xpand and minigrand
bass trillian
real guitar
all comments welcome
thanks
phil
i used kontakt - abbey road drums, damage,strings
air music technology xpand and minigrand
bass trillian
real guitar
all comments welcome
thanks
phil
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- KVRer
- 16 posts since 14 Jan, 2017 from Southeast, Michigan USA
I liked it. I like the sound of the vocals a lot. I really couldn't hear any guitar though. Also there's about 40 seconds of ocean fade out after the merry go round music fades out. I just question if everyone is going to stick around that long. You don't wait people running off...you want them to listen to your next track.
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- KVRer
- 16 posts since 14 Jan, 2017 from Southeast, Michigan USA
I meant to say:
You don't want people running off...you want them to listen to your next track.
(I'm not sure if there is a way to edit posts...I couldn't find it if there is.)
You don't want people running off...you want them to listen to your next track.
(I'm not sure if there is a way to edit posts...I couldn't find it if there is.)
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- KVRer
- Topic Starter
- 20 posts since 2 Nov, 2014
hey thanks for the comments MBCDs
the guitar is plucked and with tremolo effect. (think maybe "the smiths - how soon is now")
yeah the ocean fade out is too long (unless put at the end of an album) and should use a good field recording (i live 500 m from the beach- i used something from xpand 2)
i'm happy you made it that far through the song without running off. (you can run but you can't hide?)
cheers
phil
the guitar is plucked and with tremolo effect. (think maybe "the smiths - how soon is now")
yeah the ocean fade out is too long (unless put at the end of an album) and should use a good field recording (i live 500 m from the beach- i used something from xpand 2)
i'm happy you made it that far through the song without running off. (you can run but you can't hide?)
cheers
phil
- Boss Lovin' DR
- 12623 posts since 15 Mar, 2002 from the grimness of yorkshire
Interesting, sort of 80s goth meets early New Order. In my view you're perhaps missing a chorus (or a bit of high/low in your arrangement -perhaps strip back some of the instrumentation to manufacture a verse?) and the instruments could possibly do with a bit of eq-ing individually to create some space and carve a spot for the vocals (even I succumbed eventually ) and also a bit more use of the stereo field would make it sonically more interesting.
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- KVRer
- Topic Starter
- 20 posts since 2 Nov, 2014
thanks for the comments donkey tugger
yeah there's no chorus, it was meant to slowly build and build and then just drop off. (Didn't quite work). Might make a different version.
yeah i need to do some more eq- ing to give each new sound and vocals some room and to stand out more. (i didn't do any except some low cuts). Maybe that will help the build up as well.
What do you suggest for the making more use of the stereo field? (I can only hear in one ear and nothing much above 8000hz. So as i can't hear stereo i just approximate and give each sound its own pan position.)
cheers
phil
yeah there's no chorus, it was meant to slowly build and build and then just drop off. (Didn't quite work). Might make a different version.
yeah i need to do some more eq- ing to give each new sound and vocals some room and to stand out more. (i didn't do any except some low cuts). Maybe that will help the build up as well.
What do you suggest for the making more use of the stereo field? (I can only hear in one ear and nothing much above 8000hz. So as i can't hear stereo i just approximate and give each sound its own pan position.)
cheers
phil
- Boss Lovin' DR
- 12623 posts since 15 Mar, 2002 from the grimness of yorkshire
Sorry to hear about that, mixing is hard enough as it is!Stanevie wrote:thanks for the comments donkey tugger
What do you suggest for the making more use of the stereo field? (I can only hear in one ear and nothing much above 8000hz. So as i can't hear stereo i just approximate and give each sound its own pan position.)
cheers
phil
I was thinking that the guitar is quite central at present, and as you're using a tremelo effect why not go for one that'll do l/r panning at the same time for a bit of movement (or of course the oldalternative of doing another take and panning them hard left and right)? Also, the string sound is quite upfront and central so you could either use a stereo widening plug-in, or perhaps use a sound that's a bit more spacious, or even a reverb with a wide stereo field.
- KVRAF
- 3198 posts since 28 Aug, 2012 from Melbourne, Australia
Hi Phil,
Your track pulled me in and I enjoyed it. The vocals are cool and I like the guitar. Donkey Tugger has some great suggestions for your mix.
Like the ocean myself...
Well done.
Your track pulled me in and I enjoyed it. The vocals are cool and I like the guitar. Donkey Tugger has some great suggestions for your mix.
Like the ocean myself...
Well done.
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