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mr.me · Post by **mr.me** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 5:20 am

cinematic elements added, new drum kit, bit more polished now.

mr.me · Post by **mr.me** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 5:34 am

I got this feeling from a story an old lady told me today.

She loved a man that she hadn't seen for a long time. She got cancer, he came back and took care of her. Then when she was better, cancer took him.

core · Post by **core** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 8:12 am

I would perhaps choose different drums but it's a very nice track mr.me! What a sad story...

mr.me · Post by **mr.me** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 12:53 pm

core wrote:I would perhaps choose different drums but it's a very nice track mr.me! What a sad story...

Actually, this is the first draft...that's something I'll keep in mind.

Thank you for the feedback, I can use all the help that I can get.

Jazzyspoon · Post by **Jazzyspoon** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 2:37 pm

Solemn and beautiful. You have the musician part fully covered, now put on the producer jacket and give the drums some life. And maybe extend that ending another minute or sans vocals and bring in a bassline? This has epic potential, imo. Nice work.

mr.me · Post by **mr.me** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 9:32 pm

Jazzyspoon wrote:Solemn and beautiful. You have the musician part fully covered, now put on the producer jacket and give the drums some life. And maybe extend that ending another minute or sans vocals and bring in a bassline? This has epic potential, imo. Nice work.

Cheers man.

bit more polished now (stage 2)

eDrummist · Post by **eDrummist** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 9:46 pm

It's raw, as you've mentioned, and the song can use additional development, but I definitely like what you have so far and I really like your voice. Very nice.

vespers75 · Post by **vespers75** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 9:56 pm

Great track man...just great. The flat-line at the end is just awesome too. Melancholy and depressing music has always been my thing, and you did a great job of capturing sadness.

Yeah, the track could be developed more as some people here are saying, but any song could always be developed more. But, sometimes minimal is good too...and in this case, there is an intimate quality to the track that could be ruined if you f**k with it too much. (just my 2 cents)

Great job.

mr.me · Post by **mr.me** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 9:59 pm

eDrummist wrote:It's raw, as you've mentioned, and the song can use additional development, but I definitely like what you have so far and I really like your voice. Very nice.

Thanks man.

I'm thinking about redoing the vocals, but the first take on something always has so much sincerity. the artifacts in the vocal track kinda make it seem so real and personal.

mr.me · Post by **mr.me** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 10:03 pm

vespers75 wrote:

Great track man...just great. The flat-line at the end is just awesome too. Melancholy and depressing music has always been my thing, and you did a great job of capturing sadness.

Yeah, the track could be developed more as some people here are saying, but any song could always be developed more. But, sometimes minimal is good too...and in this case, there is an intimate quality to the track that could be ruined if you f**k with it too much. (just my 2 cents)

Great job.

Thank you so much!

there is an intimate quality to the track that could be ruined if you f**k with it too much. (just my 2 cents)

I completely agree...it's happened many times before.

mr.me · Post by **mr.me** » Fri Apr 10, 2009 10:07 pm

...and that's why the input is so great, helps keep me in check.

Emotional track with Strings, Guitar and Vocals