My First song posting! Please be gentle!!

[Bunnyboy]

Right, I've been here for more that 1000 posts and have never posted a song.

That's mainly cause I can never finish one off

But anyway, here is one that I did. It is a version of the title track from my band's last album, without the vocals and mixed a little differently (i.e I did it).

Its kinds like trancy rock, not really indicative of what i like writing, but cause its pretty simple, and fits a classic arrangement, I managed to get it finished ages ago, to quite a decent standard (IMHO).

So, criticism of the constructive kind, folks

Hope and Death is All we Get (c. 4.5MB)

[Moritz Morpheus MkIII]

eh, I forgot to officialy post here, instead of flooding your other thread with bullshit-names

your track is nice and clear, creative simplicity

[Bunnyboy]

Cheers

Its not especially interesting, but I like it as its very poppy and does what it needs.

Wait for my next opus!!

loads of supatrigga, filter sweeps, arps, micro drums and noise!!

[opiadream]

I'll be gentle alright
nice and slow...ooh yea
you'll finish one off when I'm done with ya

but seriously..
nice track for what is intends to be
wasn't too fond in the beginning
seemed kinda 'dry' I guess would be a good word
but enjoyed it more when the 'big synths' started in.
nice work

[danielmm]

Hmmm...I'm finding it a little difficult to stay with this song. Those washy sweeps seem to be a little overwhelming for me...and the rest while that is going on is sitting back in the mix somewhere.
Maybe just not my cup-o-tea.
I don't mean to be harsh as I know it is difficult to complete songs for many of us(me included)...but I think you just have to keep doing it.
Thanks for sharing!

dano

[Bunnyboy]

I'll be gentle alright
nice and slow...ooh yea
you'll finish one off when I'm done with ya

Ooh, baybee!!

Although I don't agree with you about the start I can easily see where you are coming from. I like the beginning, but then again, I have heard it many times

But thanks, if anything the start is a false indication as to what happens later

[Bunnyboy]

Hmmm...I'm finding it a little difficult to stay with this song. Those washy sweeps seem to be a little overwhelming for me...and the rest while that is going on is sitting back in the mix somewhere.
Maybe just not my cup-o-tea.
I don't mean to be harsh as I know it is difficult to complete songs for many of us(me included)...but I think you just have to keep doing it.
Thanks for sharing!

dano

I think that might be my poor attempts at EQ'ing that are to blame. I wanted the sweeps to take a background journey, but that is not happeneding. I wanted them as a bed to the main music parts mainly to cover up any bad riffs !!

[cptgone]

Nice tune!

[Spaceman Sounds]

Constructive critiscm:

I would make the bassdrum more pronounced, it needs to hold the track more.

Panning on high hats is a bit extreme, and they need bringing down a touch.

Maybe a good compressor over the sub drums i.e everything except the bass drums.

Pads and sweeps a bit loud, bring them down to let the bass drum and bassline come through.

Drums have a bit too much high eq on them making them a bit brittle.


Hope this doesn't sound too off putting, I'm just saying what I would do with the track if you handed it to me to say remix. It's all down to personal taste. I would throw in a load of interesting strange real world noises or some messed up vocals.

Track would really benefit from hard driving drums as there isn't much in the way of a melody to keep the tune flowing. Get the balance of the drums and bass sorted and the tune should flow nicely.