Chords,melody, not quite working.

[nuffink]

I think I see where ckatrun411 was coming from. It threw me at first. When he said Fminor, I presume he meant F# minor. in the key of B, F is sharp anyway. But it helps to say it. But the A wouldn't be a major7, as that would add a G#. The G is natural in this progression, so that would be odd. Not wrong but odd.

There are plenty of rock songs with progressions other than 1, 4, 5.

Indeed...

How correct is your post here, if Bm is his tonic? Not correct at all. And you know it. As a matter of fact, in the op, it was stated "The verse chords are Bm,D Bm, A,D. "

I assumed he was in the key of Bm. Cause he put that down first. That makes my post correct! And YOU KNOW IT.

... this one's Im, bIII, Im, bVII, bIII

Radical!

[BoyWonder]

In the chorus, I wonder if you are holding the B melody note into the D chord?

No. I'd spot that issue immediately! The B note is just the length of the G chord, dropping to F sharp when it hits the D.

a note like F# would be nice over both chords, it would make the G chord a major 7th which would be pleasant. or an A note would work too.

Yes, tried this line. Not changing the melody note, but adding an Fsharp to the G chord (making Gmaj7) and then changing the D chord to an A6. It sounds nice, but alters the feel to something that's not quite what I'm after.

Or keep the B melody note and use a different chord.

Thats what I'm after. So I'll try a few of your choices. Thanks.

[BertKoor]

In the chorus, I wonder if you are holding the B melody note into the D chord?

No. I'd spot that issue immediately! The B note is just the length of the G chord, dropping to F sharp when it hits the D.

I'd use an A for melody on the D chord
[edit]After the A you could go to the F#... sounds better than directly going there...[/edit]

[MotorMind]

Why don't you just try to match the chords to the melody? It can easily be done by ear--and you don't have to be bogged down with that flurry of 7th chords mentioned here.

[nuffink]

No theory thread is ever complete without some genius thinking of a new way of posting "just do it doooooood".

[MotorMind]

No theory thread is ever complete without some genius thinking of a new way of posting "just do it doooooood".

Because musical theory is basically nothing but a bunch of best practices. I know a lot of it, but hardly ever apply it consciously. Just do it, indeed.

[nuffink]

No theory thread is ever complete without some genius thinking of a new way of posting "just do it doooooood".

Because musical theory is basically nothing but a bunch of best practices. I know a lot of it, but hardly ever apply it consciously. Just do it, indeed.

But since this is music theory forum, it is ok with you if we discuss theory here? I have no doubt that it all comes naturally to you* but those of us less talented, who need the crutch of theory, are allowed to discuss it yeah?

*Unlike the vast majority of the just do it merchants who when challenged invariably turn out to be pushing the envelope of triads in C major.

[jancivil]

I would ask to hear the thing before I had any suggestions on 'why it sounds not quite right'. it's a pretty simple idea

[Jokari]

Yeah, even just a quick score or midi would do. A vague outline of the chords is not enough to understand what's going on...

[leighbeynon]

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[BertKoor]

Well, sometimes a song with "something odd" you need to get used to while listening works better than something completely smooth. It grabs the attention, since it's different.