My compostion is dying for some feedback,

[Smoothbazz]

Hi there humans,
I've made a new composition, please clean your ears before. THnx for all your energy and time..My happines would be unmeasurable.

Here is the link:

http://student-kmt.hku.nl/~bas5/CEM/Yorya.mp3

(not donwloading? please remove Yorya.mp3 from the URL and try manually)

[Mighty_Hero]

Very nice soundscapes!!!!
Some the singing didn't do it for me, but overall pretty good.

[Smoothbazz]

thnx, the voices that was actually on purpose, to make humanistic and have a twisted feeling with,.if we hear voice we want always want to hear intune and that kind a stuff, i like to go off boundaries

[shamann]

Well, if it's feedback you want, it's feedback you'll get.

Some really good stuff in there. I quite like the first 45 seconds. My problem with the track as a whole though is that it doesn't all fit together. The problem with too many extraneous jumps in technique is that the whole becomes less cohesive, too much like a medley or promo sampler, like you're saying 'hey everybody, look at my bag of tricks'. I'd like to hear you extend each part out into a motif, to find it's groove, so to speak.

For instance, turn the voices into a seperate track, extend, and then contrast them just with the blasts of shortwave radio noise or the manic zither (or bowed guitar?). That way, as you compose, you figure out the relationship between each of the sounds, not just random juxtaposition.

As always, take feedback with a grain of salt, and keep the tunes coming.

Cheers,
Steve