KVR Audio

raymond · Post by **raymond** » Thu Jul 22, 2004 6:18 am

another tune, whaddya think?
mistake

mix of goofy synths, glitchy dnb plus vocals and acoutic guitar, i'm nuts yo !~!

oh, and please tell me if the mix bugs you, this is the first mix, i layed it down the past three hours.

kara · Post by **kara** » Thu Jul 22, 2004 7:30 am

This song i certainly not a mistake

Good structure, good sound and nice vocals. The voice remembers me somebody I know, just don't remember who

My only critisme, I don't like the drums

Don't know if it is the sound or the rythm ?

And I love the guitar, good playing.

Rony

raymond · Post by **raymond** » Thu Jul 22, 2004 7:34 am

it might be both the sounds and the rhythm, because the song is about 'mistake' i f**ked the rhythm up of my guitar playing, the drum programming and in some singing, hardly noticeable but it is there. if it bugs too many people i might change it. i wanted it to be a subconcious element of the song.

Glooper · Post by **Glooper** » Thu Jul 22, 2004 9:39 am

Very Good Song...

... Slight cure'ish feel about it... A lot of potential.

I'm not sure I like the drums sounds either... I find the snare gets a bit annoying after a while... I'd be half tempted to swap it with another snare during the beginning verse, maybe using it to help create more dynamics between the verse and chorus, could do with some cymbals as well to help the dynamics.

The guitar sounds good... Though I'd be half tempted to work out an accompany guitar bit and stick it on the right, or use MDA Stereo or something to try and increase the spread of the existing guitar.

But great stuff so far...

Ben

Ixox · Post by **Ixox** » Thu Jul 22, 2004 9:47 am

Good song...

For me the drum is just much too loud... specialy during vocal parts.
You could try cutting removing several DBs to the drums when the vocal is in and turn it up during instrumental parts. Just an idea...
But i like its sound and the rythm...

raymond · Post by **raymond** » Thu Jul 22, 2004 4:11 pm

yeah i need to play with the mix a bit, the vocal does get muddied in the chorus part and hard to hear.

and yeah the cure, i was totally going for an 80s synth poppy sound especially with that bright sparkly synth. and the chord progression is totally 80s style. got to get down with the cheese every once and a while.

Sicklecell666 · Post by **Sicklecell666** » Thu Jul 22, 2004 4:34 pm

I'd pick the either the drums or everything else & ditch one or the other, they do not sit well at all together to me, but as two seperate things they're both good.

Sounds like 2 seperate tracks that need to be split apart.

raymond · Post by **raymond** » Thu Jul 22, 2004 10:47 pm

sorry you don't like the combination sickle, it's a different asthetic.

anyway i upped the final mix.

mystahr · Post by **mystahr** » Fri Jul 23, 2004 5:29 am

raymond wrote: mix of goofy synths, glitchy dnb plus vocals and acoutic guitar, i'm nuts yo !~!

I'd still say push the drums back a bit, they rather take the spotlight too much, or cut them from time to time. The weird and quick synth sequences are rather cool.

No mistake here

And when the accoustic guitar comes out in the end I realize that should have been way more foreground throughout the tune. And I think its that and the bass that reminisce of the Cure most.

Enjoyed

raymond · Post by **raymond** » Fri Jul 23, 2004 5:38 am

oh and if you haven't heard the new cure album, good. that's a good thing. it's like fingernails on a chalk board. trust me, no matter what your friends tell you, thc cure's the cure is no cure what so ever.

mistake - please comment : )