More tense electrified distopian futurepop

[Kim Lajoie]

Hi,

Another twisted pop song. Words and vocals by my talented sister. I think I went a bit over the top with this one.

Undone.

Production diary (with audio!) here

-Kim.

[Kim Lajoie]

Pander to my likings
Spit our your disdain
Butter me up slowly
To bring me down again

f**k I'm undone
It's begun
It's begun
You turned it
You turned it on

Burning sensitivity
Numbing your senses
Pleasure defenceless

Squeeze me out of this
You got me into this
Let me out of this
Now it's begun

-Kim.

[Gargoyle]

Definitely a little bit OTT, but it works, Kim

I'll have a more in-depth listen later, but you and your sister really do make a good "team"!

[Kim Lajoie]

Thanks, Gargoyle.

-Kim.

[jackson]

Right f**king slamming tune

[Gargoyle]

Back

Yeah, great stuff. I really enjoyed reading the production diary too and was very much interested in how you put it all together.

There are so many elements in this that really make a difference - subtle things that are really worth listening out for and learning from (especially some of the vox snippet manipulations). It's the sum of the whole which makes it, definitely.

One mixing note for me is on the lower strings - which I reckon get a bit lost, but that might just be me and my prediliction for strings

And as for your sister's voice - I don't care that Melodyne's involved. Her voice has tremendous character in itself

I think I'll just agree with jackson's comment in summary

If this and Horse Head aren't worthy of a label release then I think I'll just give up on music right now and would urge everyone else to do the same

[Kim Lajoie]

One mixing note for me is on the lower strings - which I reckon get a bit lost, but that might just be me and my prediliction for strings

It's a tough balance. If I bring up the cellos and basses they start to take focus away from the vocal. If I reduce other elements to bring out their clarity, I lose the guitars and distorted synths.

I'm still not sure about the strings. I might have preferred it without - keeping the second and third choruses rough and harsh like the first one.

Oh well, there's always next time.

-Kim.

[sic]

Your sister really sounds like Bjoerk, and the music fits perfectly

- Ulli -

[Kim Lajoie]

Thanks sic.

Anyone else? This thread is dropping fast than ... something that drops really fast.

-Kim.

[The Unsigned]

Another cool track. It rocks alright! My only concern is the mix isn't very clean in parts. I can't put my finger on what's causing it though, with so much going on at once. I know it's supposed to be rough and dirty but there's something not right about the mix. The song is cool though; I don't think you should give up on it until the mix is right. It's a good piece.

P3U6!SUn 3H+

[xtp]

I enjoyed this, cool power feel to the vocals.

[frequency_algorithm]

is your sister hot.

[Shane Sanders]

Your sister really sounds like Bjoerk, and the music fits perfectly

- Ulli -

She sounds a lot more like Annette Strean of Venus Hum to me, in both tone and phrasing style. I like the chorus a lot and the odd timbral choices. Creative and unusual in lots of ways.