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guitarcomputer · Post by **guitarcomputer** » Mon Jun 07, 2004 10:19 pm

Here's anouther one of my songs... kinda like the last song I did, except a lil heavier.. but not quite... anyways... It's kinda an alternative pop type song... the typical stuff I do.. I think I may eventually add a bridge in it besides the break that's in it now... but I'm not sure... I like it the way it is at the moment so.. thought I'd upload it... because I haven't had anything up for 2 months or so...

but I'm still worken on stuff all the time

Hope You all enjoy...

It's Called "Stumble Through This Life"
http://www.fallingdownstudio.com/stumble.mp3

as always, tell me what you think, good or bad

thanx..
-Kyle

oh.. btw... I'll put the lyrics up here somtime tonight...

donkey tugger · Post by **donkey tugger** » Mon Jun 07, 2004 10:30 pm

Quality as ever.

Nice clean production. One thing I would do though is have a lot more dynamic change between the verse and chorus. Don't be afraid of making the verses a lot quieter, so it isn't even touching the 0db level on the limiter!

At the moment this actually sounds to me as if its going down in volume when the distorted guitar comes in (It isnt, but thats way it sounds..)

guitarcomputer · Post by **guitarcomputer** » Mon Jun 07, 2004 10:53 pm

thanx DT..

I'm hearing the db level of the verse vox now... def going to turn it down a lil bit there... I thought it was a lil loud myself before I uploaded it... but.. being a bum, I left it there... heh...

thanx for the listen

hao nao · Post by **hao nao** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 12:38 am

sounds good to me ... I played it a second time through the stereo in the other room

I never had good ears to catch lyrics, because I get carried away by the music I suppose, but something to consider is to have at least the most important lines stand out, unless there is a tradition of submerged lyrics

the part about "how would we turn out without this time and without this space" is what makes me want to know the rest of the lyrics

so I hope you do post the lyrics

but it does sound good to me

guitarcomputer · Post by **guitarcomputer** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 2:48 am

Lyrics are the following:

Verse #1
Hello Hello, I said at the day when
Everyone took a look where they had been
and Everytime we never did look back to the day that we always said trust me

Hello Hello, I screamed when I saw you
You never did see me but I thought I knew
That you were alive and well, but you were lost in tim, lost in space

Chorus
All the time I stumble throught this life
(Na na na)
They push and pull me, but I won't break in two
(I won't break in two)

Verse #2
Hello Hello, I said in my head when
I looked at times past, and I thought of you
and everytime I never did look back to the day that you never said follow me

Hello Hello, I screamed when I saw you
You finally did see me and I thought I knew
How whould we turn out, without this time, and without this space

guitarcomputer · Post by **guitarcomputer** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 2:51 am

Hey havran, glad you like

and thanx for the listen even on your stereo

donkey tugger · Post by **donkey tugger** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 3:09 am

singing along!

guitarcomputer · Post by **guitarcomputer** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 3:39 am

donkey tugger wrote:singing along!

CypherOne · Post by **CypherOne** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 7:00 am

guitarcomputer wrote:Lyrics are the following:

That you were alive and well, but you were lost in tim

that happened to me once...

mystahr · Post by **mystahr** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 7:16 am

As usual you come with quite the intriguing tune. This time accompanied by some great lyrics as well. Sounding good allready, although I personally feel a tighter snare may aid in balancing the song a bit more. Other then that, I can only say; looking forward to the next upgrade

scuzzphut · Post by **scuzzphut** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 8:11 am

Great work, GC

On my second listen - really enjoying this one

guitarcomputer · Post by **guitarcomputer** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 2:13 pm

CypherOne...
heh... yeah... same here

Mystahr...
Thanx, gald your liken it... I already mixed the vocal down a little bit, I might upload that somtime today... but other than that haven't had a chance to work on it yet... on the snare sound you were saying mayb a tighter snare would help... different sample? or eq it mayb with a little more high end?

scuzzphut...

thanx scuzzphut... glad your liken it!

hopefully I'll work on this one some more l8r tonight and have anouther mix of it up... I'm wanting to add a bridge to it, but I just can't get somthing at the moment that fits right... taken a break with some friends today.. mayb that'll get some creative juice flowen when I get back

thanx for taken the time to listen as always

Ixox · Post by **Ixox** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 2:30 pm

Great song !!!
I really love it.... Just listened to it several times...
Every thing is very well done...
Kind of song you sing along with after 2 listening...

Congratulation...

Just to say something negative : i don't like the snare...

guitarcomputer · Post by **guitarcomputer** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 3:05 pm

Ixox...
lol!

don't like that snare huh? heh... I think I do need a better snare and kick sample tho... the ones I have are fine.. just... they could be better...

glad you like the song tho

regardless of the snare

McLilith · Post by **McLilith** » Tue Jun 08, 2004 3:38 pm

This is one of my most favorite things I've ever heard on K-v-R!

As far as a critique: In some places in the chorus, things get a little jumbled with the vocals. During the "na na na" line, there seems to be a little too much conflict between it and the main vocal. Oddly enough, it doesn't bug me later in the song as much as it does closer to the beginning. For the earlier instances of the chorus, you might even consider dropping the "na na na" from the mix, and save it for the "big ending", or something like that.

If you do another version, please post a link to it.

Right now, I really must be going. I simply have to play this again.

later,
McLilith

Anouther radio type song I spose...