Fragile Gods - "Cold Comfort" (four track EP released)

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KVRAF
5700 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Sat Dec 08, 2018 4:24 pm

A surreal, downbeat song about being haunted by a failed relationship. Aika Zabala lifts the gloom with additional vocals.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BB3cKZuu3uE

Synths: Repro-1, Repro-5, Icarus, Audjoo Helix
Drums: BFD3

The lyrics are in the video, click the CC button. Any feedback is appreciated.

Edits:
Dec 16, 2018 - I made some very minor tweaks to the chorus vocal levels and EQ in an attempt to declutter things a bit.

Feb 17, 2019 - The four track Cold Comfort EP is out now in all the usual places:
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Last edited by Frantz on Sun Feb 17, 2019 6:03 pm, edited 10 times in total.

KVRist
233 posts since 25 Nov, 2013

Post Sat Dec 08, 2018 9:39 pm

Nice one, a bit of a Bowie feel to your singing.
The additional female vocals lifts the song as well.

KVRAF
22355 posts since 20 Oct, 2007 from not here

Post Sun Dec 09, 2018 10:26 am

Really good. The drum track brought me in, very happening groove and I find that 16ths in the one synth helps the propulsion factor right from the start as well.

And I like the bridge, and particularly where it happens makes a nice form, and it needs exactly that contrasting section before it wraps up.
Very smart poprock.

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KVRAF
20450 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Post Sun Dec 09, 2018 10:45 am

My Feedback

Music - 9
Instruments - 10
Performance - 10
Mix -10

Overall - 9.75

Comments: Another dude stuck in the 80s. LOL. I meant that as a good thing. Vocals a cross between Billy Idol and some other dude whose name I can't think of. Pisses me off that I can't do stuff this good. LOL. Love the way you recorded the vocals. Great production all the way around.

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KVRian
581 posts since 20 Oct, 2018

Post Sun Dec 09, 2018 1:17 pm

Hmm...interesting.
For a noob like me it sounds crowded when you both sing with echo.
I don't think your two voices fit together it sounds a bit wrong.
That aside it is a nice song.

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KVRAF
20450 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Post Sun Dec 09, 2018 1:21 pm

Saffran wrote:
Sun Dec 09, 2018 1:17 pm
Hmm...interesting.
For a noob like me it sounds crowded when you both sing with echo.
I don't think your two voices fit together it sounds a bit wrong.
That aside it is a nice song.
You needed to grow up in the 80s to really get this song and how it was done.

I'd kill to be able to do something this good.

KVRAF
22355 posts since 20 Oct, 2007 from not here

Post Sun Dec 09, 2018 3:29 pm

I would place the female voice parts away from the middle, myself.

I paid little attention to popular music in the 80s. I'm not going by any reference points, this has a good groove and is formally satisfying to me.

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Boss Lovin' DR
8221 posts since 15 Mar, 2002 from the grimness of yorkshire

Post Sun Dec 09, 2018 3:59 pm

wagtunes wrote:
Sun Dec 09, 2018 10:45 am
Vocals a cross between Billy Idol and some other dude whose name I can't think of.
Phil Oakey? Definitely getting a (more gritty) Human League feel here. Good stuff.

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KVRAF
20450 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Post Sun Dec 09, 2018 4:13 pm

donkey tugger wrote:
Sun Dec 09, 2018 3:59 pm
wagtunes wrote:
Sun Dec 09, 2018 10:45 am
Vocals a cross between Billy Idol and some other dude whose name I can't think of.
Phil Oakey? Definitely getting a (more gritty) Human League feel here. Good stuff.
Yes, thanks. That's it. Think I told him that on his last tune too. Guy's got a real commercial sound. Well, for 30 years ago anyway.

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KVRAF
2795 posts since 3 May, 2003 from Germany

Post Sun Dec 09, 2018 6:13 pm

Another good compact pop tune you've done here.
I like that it starts up quick with the vocals.
The vocals mix (man / woman), worked for me (just would have be interesting if the female vocals would have been more spread in the stereo field... but better?)
And also I'm no expert for 80s music :clown:
I liked the change at 2:28!
When the first refrain came in it was a tad too busy for my taste (but this is hi level nitpicking).

Thanks a lot :)
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KVRAF
6606 posts since 9 Mar, 2003 from the bridge of sighs

Post Sun Dec 09, 2018 6:18 pm

well made ...
another quality effort on your part ...
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KVRAF

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5700 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

Post Sun Dec 09, 2018 7:08 pm

kloon wrote:
Sat Dec 08, 2018 9:39 pm
Nice one, a bit of a Bowie feel to your singing.
The additional female vocals lifts the song as well.
And there I was thinking, I finally did a song where I avoided sounding like Bowie. You shot that down in comment number one. :P

Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for commenting kloon. :)

KVRian
546 posts since 16 Nov, 2006

Post Mon Dec 10, 2018 7:18 am

I really enjoyed it. I liked the call and response with the male and female voices. I can see this being in a the credits of a movie or even a music video. Nice job!
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KVRAF
2672 posts since 28 Aug, 2012 from Melbourne, Australia

Post Mon Dec 10, 2018 2:13 pm

Quality 80s track with all the requisite elements.
Enjoyed it!
Well done.
:)
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KVRAF
2089 posts since 17 Apr, 2004

Post Tue Dec 11, 2018 8:57 am

Listened, liked, came back for more.

I think the vocals are fine in the verses, but you could separate them more in the chorus.
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