KVR Audio

dekky · Post by **dekky** » Tue Jul 13, 2004 7:02 pm

Took me one year of watching the forums and listening to all the stuff, about 4 months of membership, and 2 weeks of posting a bit before i now finally have the balls to post my first one as well.

so no talk about the technical stuff for now, on to the song:

http://www.dekonstrukt.de/cigaretteswine.mp3

and pleaze don't be too honest

mckenic · Post by **mckenic** » Tue Jul 13, 2004 7:10 pm

I like this dekky,

Just my cup of tea!

Thanks for sharing!

Dave

t-willy · Post by **t-willy** » Tue Jul 13, 2004 7:12 pm

now that is one fine damn song!!! very suprised indeed. excellent vocals. the little bongo type roll sound on the percussion was very cool. the bass sound on the chorus was really neat as well. my only gripe - the damn clapping near the end

man, post some more

lates

t-willy

blaster78 · Post by **blaster78** » Tue Jul 13, 2004 7:17 pm

cool tune, really enjoying it.

looks like it was worth hanging around.... you shouldn't have waited so long

steve.

austere · Post by **austere** » Tue Jul 13, 2004 7:42 pm

written while listening to the song.

not my cup of tea but nicely excuted! the intro reminds me a lot of old New Order

. the vocals are good, really nicely recorded! I don't like the noisy sound in the beginning however I do like what you did with the vocals & the noise at ±3:15

listening to the song for the 2nd time in a row and i think you've overused the grainy/noise sound but otherwise it's quite good!

though i can relate to the lyrics the song on a whole doesn't appeal to me that much but i do tip my hat to you (if had one that is) for what you did cause it sounds pretty good to my ears (mix & production).

austere · Post by **austere** » Tue Jul 13, 2004 9:06 pm

scratch what i said earlier about the song not appealing to me... after listening to it 2 more times it grew on me and now i think it's cool.

still think the noise is over-used though and the suggestion of a three people audience is sort of funny.

anyway, keep the good work for i'll be clapping for you too

dekky · Post by **dekky** » Tue Jul 13, 2004 9:11 pm

actually it is a two people audience

austere · Post by **austere** » Tue Jul 13, 2004 10:40 pm

dekky wrote:actually it is a two people audience

then i am the 3rd, cos i am clapping behind my computer

drez · Post by **drez** » Wed Jul 14, 2004 12:33 am

I love it! I love the vocals, they fit the style of the song perfectly. The boom-chick sound is great and the production is really good. I love the high bass sound on the chorus and the vocal work at just past 3 minutes is a cool touch for sure!

The claps are well placed out wide like that. Just a great tune. At the beginning I like the reverse reverb intro, very nice. The "telephone" effect at the end would sound pretty cool as delays of the melody in different parts of the tune methinks.

Awesome stuff! Agreed...don't wait so long in between choons!

bluedad · Post by **bluedad** » Wed Jul 14, 2004 12:56 am

I love this, too! very catchy tune, infectious guitars and bass. nice voice, too

donkey tugger · Post by **donkey tugger** » Wed Jul 14, 2004 1:15 am

Ahh, very nice, compact too, not a lot of wastage in the old songwriting (though personally, I would probably try to get to the chorus a bit sooner

). When the bass plays the louder thing in the chorus, the guitar tends to get lost a bit, so you should probably overdub another one, or automate the level (actually, guitar level could do with coming up a bit overall).

I think you missed a little trick in the middle 8 at 3m 12s there by sticking on the F# and not going up to G# for the last of of the four - and in fact holding that for another bar - hooks my man, maketh the pop song!

Love the clapping.

Sascha Franck · Post by **Sascha Franck** » Wed Jul 14, 2004 2:13 am

Nice song, executed fine as well!
For my taste you could sing a bit more, hm, what can I say... *gritty* at times. But then, a) who am I to say such things, not singing at all and b) it might only be a matter of taste anyways.
Love the clapping at the end too!

mystahr · Post by **mystahr** » Wed Jul 14, 2004 6:25 am

dekky wrote:actually it is a two people audience

And an audience growing more and more...

This sounds pretty darn okay. Just don't wait that long with the second one

Like Donks said; try entering a bit more of a hook and you got it nailed.

Welcome to the Cafe Dekky; I hope more tracks from you will see the light in here ....

Ian B · Post by **Ian B** » Wed Jul 14, 2004 6:57 am

Now that made a fine start to the day here. Very nice indeed

Like drez, I loved the vocals.

dekky · Post by **dekky** » Wed Jul 14, 2004 8:19 am

thank you, thank you, thank you for the extra-clapping and the suggestions.

donkey tugger wrote: I think you missed a little trick in the middle 8 at 3m 12s there by sticking on the F# and not going up to G# for the last of of the four - and in fact holding that for another bar - hooks my man, maketh the pop song!

i'll try that tonight after work, and we'll add some duh-duh-duhs in the last 16 bars

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Sascha Franck wrote: For my taste you could sing a bit more, hm, what can I say... *gritty* at times.

I have to admit that it is not me singing (i wish i could), it is my friend david. the more gritty'n'grimy stuff can be found in the songs of our "other" band.
sounds like this:
http://www.thorn11.de/thorn___06/multim ... tState.mp3
http://www.thorn11.de/thorn___06/multimedia/sway.mp3

after all these positive reactions i really feel tempted to post all the songs i have and to add clapping all over the place, but that might be a little to much

Seems to be "first song posting day" - so i'll hav