First Tune Posted. Be Gentle Heheh. Kidding. Kick My Ass
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- KVRer
- Topic Starter
- 16 posts since 27 Apr, 2004 from Seattle, WA
You know what? I think my monitors suck fatty. I really think that is the main prob. GD it. That sucks.
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- KVRAF
- 12977 posts since 29 Sep, 2003 from Ottawa, Canada
OR... I can't speak for the others, but I can guarantee that MY speakers suck. 
Maybe that's the problem from my end. 
Perhaps too much criticism for a first attempt-- sometimes the 'constructive' part overtakes the complimentary part, but if it wasn't clear, I'll say it again-- that's a kick-ass track, and even if you did nothing to change it, it would continue to be a kick-ass track.
Greg
Maybe that's the problem from my end. Perhaps too much criticism for a first attempt-- sometimes the 'constructive' part overtakes the complimentary part, but if it wasn't clear, I'll say it again-- that's a kick-ass track, and even if you did nothing to change it, it would continue to be a kick-ass track.
Greg
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- KVRist
- 152 posts since 23 Sep, 2003 from Oregon
Nice tune. Are you trying to make a demo here or a finished product? It's a lot to take on... writing the songs, playing the instruments, singing, producing, engineering, etc. I think the song comes through just fine.
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- KVRAF
- 7672 posts since 9 Nov, 2003 from Netherlands
I'll just fall in line here by expressing this was a damn fine song allready.
I think Donkey and some others have given some great pointers here allready on the mixing part. All I know for sure on that front is that it takes time to learn how to balance a track the right way, and then still when you have that down, it doesn't mean you have a blueprint for all songs, as each new song needs a new approach.
I will however strongly suggest to keep fiddling and trying and keep at writing songs such as this. The knowledge will follow in time.
It helps to listen to others here, and if you'll stick around you'll get a lot of free pointers and not necessarily on your own music. I learn a lot from listening to others tunes and all the suggestions that are made for that.
Keep on going on here..
Welcome to KvR btw
I think Donkey and some others have given some great pointers here allready on the mixing part. All I know for sure on that front is that it takes time to learn how to balance a track the right way, and then still when you have that down, it doesn't mean you have a blueprint for all songs, as each new song needs a new approach.
I will however strongly suggest to keep fiddling and trying and keep at writing songs such as this. The knowledge will follow in time.
It helps to listen to others here, and if you'll stick around you'll get a lot of free pointers and not necessarily on your own music. I learn a lot from listening to others tunes and all the suggestions that are made for that.
Keep on going on here..
Welcome to KvR btw
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- KVRAF
- 2830 posts since 2 Mar, 2003 from The only civilized county in Texas
Nice tune.
Whole lots of very similar chords, so more variation is called for.
Intro: that's a very simple riff. and the guitar plays exactly the same as the piano. Superfluous if you ask me. I'd leave out the guitar (let the piano play it twice?), but instead bring the guitar in on the second or third verse ("radar SCREEN" would be the perfect spot) for a bit of sonic variation.
Also, don't have the guitar playing the exact same thing as the piano. Instead of those distorted eighths I would play a funky rhyhtm in 16ths with a clean sound. Maybe not throughout, but in places. With piano, guitar, bass and drum all playing the same 8ths this tune is becoming rather insistent after a while.
V.
Whole lots of very similar chords, so more variation is called for.
Intro: that's a very simple riff. and the guitar plays exactly the same as the piano. Superfluous if you ask me. I'd leave out the guitar (let the piano play it twice?), but instead bring the guitar in on the second or third verse ("radar SCREEN" would be the perfect spot) for a bit of sonic variation.
Also, don't have the guitar playing the exact same thing as the piano. Instead of those distorted eighths I would play a funky rhyhtm in 16ths with a clean sound. Maybe not throughout, but in places. With piano, guitar, bass and drum all playing the same 8ths this tune is becoming rather insistent after a while.
V.
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- KVRist
- 426 posts since 23 Apr, 2004 from the people's republic of popistan
hello fellow first song poster
i really like the song .. especially from 3.30 onwards.
the piano is just supercool, if i need some piano parts someday is it okay to pm you? 'cause my abilities do not allow me to go beyond the 4 finger chord barrier myself.
i really like the song .. especially from 3.30 onwards.
the piano is just supercool, if i need some piano parts someday is it okay to pm you? 'cause my abilities do not allow me to go beyond the 4 finger chord barrier myself.
My Distortion is Analogue...
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- KVRer
- Topic Starter
- 16 posts since 27 Apr, 2004 from Seattle, WA
Ok Thanks All. I am going to take this song down now and rework it. I will repost sometime in the future for input. Again thank you very much.