Taron wrote:I'd start off with "CONGRATULATIONS", Local Daddy! <Baby
You've made a properly complete arrangement with Noisetar, which already is a considerable accomplishment. I enjoy it musically almost entirely, except at 2:24, where you went with the lead "flute" for the Dorian 7th (2 halftones below tonic) rather than Ionian (1 halftone below tonic), which would've given it a little more spirit, if you asked me...kinda yanked on my senses a little and went against the sensibility of the sound itself somehow. For sure, it's a matter of taste, because it's not "wrong", just...a little "meh" to me. The rest, however, is very, very nice. Oh, maybe the "choo choo train" noise (to the left) went on a bit long without sounding sophisticated, sort of pulling down the sense of quality you otherwise establish so nicely. I would either fade it away before 2:38 to give your "grand finale" the proper space and distinction.
This is my reaction after a first listen. Hope it makes sense and inspires you a little?! Great to have you in the OSC gang, that's for sure!
AND congrats again on the second one!
Thanks for taking the time to listen to my track and thanks for sharing your very precise observations. I tried playing that note the way you suggest (raising it a half step) and I like the result. It gives it a bit more emphasis which may or may not be what I want there. I like it both ways so I'll play with it a bit further and see. But beyond that your comment has led me to sit down and analyze things a bit further which has got my compositional juices flowing so I may make some bigger changes/additions.
And as for the chugging noise, that is exactly the kind of feedback I need because it is something I somehow tuned out but now it jumps out at me. It was intended to be a background element that blends in with the whole but I now see that it comes to the fore a bit too much at times and makes too much of its own statement (or non-statement which is more the problem). I will either have to back it off a bit as you say or maybe add some tonal and may be rhythmic movement to it. Again, thanks for the feedback and thanks for your kind words to a new (second time) father!