The Wagtunes Corner (Review Me For Return Review)

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KVRAF
17437 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

Post Fri Nov 08, 2019 2:13 am

ProfessionalTom wrote:
Thu Nov 07, 2019 11:56 pm
What's the instrument from 0:42 to 0:42 then the same from 0:50 to 0:52. Sounds like a crying violin or something. Is it a synth?
That's Realivox Ladies singing "Mmm"

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ProfessionalTom
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520 posts since 10 Oct, 2019

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Post Fri Nov 08, 2019 3:24 am

Sounds interesting. Thanks.
I'm a professional and you can't deny it. If you do, you either were tricked by the League, or you are from the League.

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KVRAF
17437 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

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Post Fri Nov 08, 2019 3:48 am

3rd track from my upcoming CD "Chroma"

The opening riff on this one was derived from "Tie A Yellow Ribbon" by Tony Orlando & Dawn. Hard to believe.

The song itself is a total piss in prog rock. Personally, one of the more interesting things I've done. If I asked somebody to listen to just one track of my music, this would be it. As good, bad or ridiculous as this sounds, it is exactly what I was going for. You really don't want to miss this one.

Yellow Sun

And so I sit on the hot sand
You beating down
My skin is pealing like taters
I start to frown
You know that I don't want you round
Why don't you go back to your town

Oh yellow sun you're a demon
You make me sweat like a pig
You're worse than listening to hip hop
I just don't dig
Oh yellow sun you're a devil
You make me burn like a roast
You're only good in the winter
To make my toast

My car is just like an oven
I get no relief
Even walking a block to the drug store
All I get is grief
You know that I don't want you round
Why don't you go back to your town

I try to open the windows
They're all fried shut
Can't even have sex to cool off
You burn my nut
You know that I don't want you round
Why don't you go back to your town

Repeat Chorus

Instrumental Break

Repeat Verse 1

Well I've just had it with you boy
You can burn in hell
If you went out in a nova
It's just as well
You know that I don't want you round
Why don't you go back to your town

Repeat Chorus

Instrumental To End

https://soundcloud.com/steven-wagenheim/yellow-sun

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Bansaw
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793 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

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Post Fri Nov 08, 2019 6:56 pm

wagtunes wrote:
Fri Nov 08, 2019 3:48 am
You're worse than listening to hip hop
Lol...
Half the time I visit your thread just to look at the lyrics !

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KVRAF
17437 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

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Post Fri Nov 08, 2019 7:02 pm

Bansaw wrote:
Fri Nov 08, 2019 6:56 pm
wagtunes wrote:
Fri Nov 08, 2019 3:48 am
You're worse than listening to hip hop
Lol...
Half the time I visit your thread just to look at the lyrics !
Any comments on the track?

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Bansaw
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793 posts since 19 Aug, 2008

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Post Sat Nov 09, 2019 10:25 am

Its OK. There's some 70s bands influence in there. The instrumental is a very good idea, - echos of ELO or Beatles. I'm not sure its executed as well as it could have been. The last two chords of it were clever though.
The final instrumental was also a clever play between minor and major, and was somewhat better executed.
imho.

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wagtunes
KVRAF
17437 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

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Post Sat Nov 09, 2019 10:38 am

Bansaw wrote:
Sat Nov 09, 2019 10:25 am
Its OK. There's some 70s bands influence in there. The instrumental is a very good idea, - echos of ELO or Beatles. I'm not sure its executed as well as it could have been. The last two chords of it were clever though.
The final instrumental was also a clever play between minor and major, and was somewhat better executed.
imho.
Thanks for the listen and the feedback. Much appreciated.

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KVRAF
17437 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

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Post Sat Nov 09, 2019 2:19 pm

4th track from my upcoming CD "Chroma"

This one was derived from the song "Red Roses For A Blue Lady" recorded by many artists. If you're familiar with it, you will not the derivation sounds nothing like it. The opening riff is from the main theme of the song after applying chromatic harmony.

Red Rose Gal

She smells like a spring time day
She tastes just like chardonnay
She moves like a graceful swan
My love it goes on and on

I'm so lucky to have her with me
Oh she's just a joy to see
She's my dream
My coffee's cream
She's not just a pal
She's my red rose gal

She looks like a priceless pearl
She's like no one in the world
She makes me the happy one
It's bliss when the day is done

Repeat Chorus

And when the day it comes to an end
I say goodnight to my best friend

Repeat Chorus

Outro

https://soundcloud.com/steven-wagenheim/red-rose-gal

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Frantz
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5215 posts since 18 Jul, 2008 from New York

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Post Sat Nov 09, 2019 2:42 pm

"Yellow Sun" is very original and fun. I think the song would have benefited from a little more time spent polishing the lyrics and arrangement but the quality is very high given the furious pace you are cranking these out.

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wagtunes
KVRAF
17437 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

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Post Sat Nov 09, 2019 3:22 pm

Frantz wrote:
Sat Nov 09, 2019 2:42 pm
"Yellow Sun" is very original and fun. I think the song would have benefited from a little more time spent polishing the lyrics and arrangement but the quality is very high given the furious pace you are cranking these out.
These are pretty much sketches Frantz. If I spent the time I should spend on every song, nothing would ever get finished.

Anyway, glad you liked it for what it is. Thanks for the listen and the feedback.

aaron aardvark
KVRAF
1638 posts since 22 Jan, 2011 from near Los Angeles

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Post Sat Nov 09, 2019 8:45 pm

wagtunes,
Thank you for the review and defending me a bit! Now I'm listening to "Red Roses". Not sure what percentage of the melodies you wrote with this, though the melodies are very nice. Audio quality is very good. I dig on the piano tones and string sounds. Your vocals are pretty good, some of your better singing is on this song. Nothing really to complain about. Nice song and recording! :)

aaron aardvark
KVRAF
1638 posts since 22 Jan, 2011 from near Los Angeles

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Post Sat Nov 09, 2019 9:03 pm

wagtunes,
The description of 'Yellow Sun' sounded intriguing, so I'm reviewing it also. The piano and lead guitar minded me of Queen a bit (a compliment). Did you use the IK Brian May on any of the guitar? Nice song and recording. Am I correct you have some humor baked into the lyrics on this one? I feel the highlight of the song is around 5:40, sounds quite nice in that region. :)

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KVRAF
17437 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

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Post Sun Nov 10, 2019 3:07 am

aaron aardvark wrote:
Sat Nov 09, 2019 8:45 pm
wagtunes,
Thank you for the review and defending me a bit! Now I'm listening to "Red Roses". Not sure what percentage of the melodies you wrote with this, though the melodies are very nice. Audio quality is very good. I dig on the piano tones and string sounds. Your vocals are pretty good, some of your better singing is on this song. Nothing really to complain about. Nice song and recording! :)
Thanks for the listen and feedback Aaron. To answer your question, the whole song was written by me.

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wagtunes
KVRAF
17437 posts since 8 Oct, 2014

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Post Sun Nov 10, 2019 3:09 am

aaron aardvark wrote:
Sat Nov 09, 2019 9:03 pm
wagtunes,
The description of 'Yellow Sun' sounded intriguing, so I'm reviewing it also. The piano and lead guitar minded me of Queen a bit (a compliment). Did you use the IK Brian May on any of the guitar? Nice song and recording. Am I correct you have some humor baked into the lyrics on this one? I feel the highlight of the song is around 5:40, sounds quite nice in that region. :)
This was a pleasant surprise. To answer your question, actually, I didn't use the Brian May Collection on this one. But it does sound a bit like it. As for the lyrics, yes, it was meant to be funny. Hope it was. LOL. Thanks for the listen and feedback as always.

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markkuja
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839 posts since 28 Oct, 2005 from Finland

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Post Sun Nov 10, 2019 4:23 am

Red Rose Gal
Nice song. Well done recording. Good sounds and balance on mix. Great job

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